Talk:Dan Jones (footballer, born 1994)/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:22, 5 July 2022 (UTC)

That is it. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 20:44, 8 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Tend to avoid single-sentence paras, lead could be either expanded to make the first para larger or merge/split accordingly.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "during the 2016–17 season" seems weird to link the Grimsby season when he's playing for other clubs in that season, maybe just the general season article?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "of the 2019–20 season on loan " lnk?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "end of the 2020–21 season" ditto.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "Jones born" ->" Dan Jones was born"
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Could add DOB there too.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * " the Academy at" no need for capital A.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "youth-team" no hyphen required.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "Jones' progress" Jones's.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "meniscus cartilage tear" link?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "at Victoria Park on" context?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Link caretaker.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "manager Paul Murray" manager has a link.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "who would last just six weeks" bit tabloid, maybe "who lasted six weeks"
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "helping "Pools" to avoid" avoid unexplained nicks.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "summer.[15][16][14] " order.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "made just 12" "just" is inherently POV.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "in just three league" stop saying "just".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "only five appearances" ditto with "only", perhaps context so say how many games the team had that season or something to give people a comparison.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "would miss" ->"missed".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "impressed new" according to whom?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "as the "Bluebirds" finished" nickname again.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "having stood out in an inconsistent Barrow team" your opinion or attributable quote?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "Manager Ian Evatt stated.." it was Alexander a couple of sentences ago?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "was curtailed early on 16 March" no need for early, curtailed means that.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * " in an EFL Trophy tie against" overlinked.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "on 62-minutes" no hyphen.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "a yellow card" link.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "new "Ammies" manager" nickname...
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "honest... he'll" non-breaking space before ... for an ellipsis.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "red card" link.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "to switch the play" link or explain.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * "throw-in" link.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)
 * Brilliant, many thanks!--EchetusXe 23:56, 9 July 2022 (UTC)