Talk:Dances with Smurfs/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer:  The Flash  {talk} 00:00, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

Yello! I saw this episode when it aired and I was cracking up the whole way through, so I was excited to see it at GAN. Check out Talk:I Married Marge/GA1 for my structural set up. Let's get started,  The Flash  {talk} 00:00, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

Lead

 * Is there any source for its UK airdate?
 * I couldn't find one; that was there before i worked on the page. I've removed it. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
 * "[...]a platform for politically charges accusations against[...]" -> can you clean this up?
 * Done. Better? —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
 * Can you either expand the second paragraph or combine it with the third one?
 * I've expanded that second paragraph a bit, but if you think it's no good, feel free to drop that new sentence and combine the two paragraphs instead. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

Plot summary

 * "Cartman starts projecting his announcements into television screens classroom[...]" -> "television screens classroom"?
 * Fixed. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
 * Shouldn't Cartman's book be italicized?
 * Done. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
 * Please add a period after "Dances with Smurfs"
 * Ok. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
 * Can you reword the whole Avatar part? It makes it seem like James Cameron adapted the film, not the book.
 * Is this better? —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

Theme

 * Can you add an image of Beck?
 * You got it. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
 * "[...]writes on a blackboard to demonstrate to make a political point[...]" -> try and clean that up a bit
 * Is this better? —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
 * "[...]and that he particularly enjoys Cartman's hair[...]" -> "particularly enjoyed"
 * Ok. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

Cultural references

 * Delink to Avatar and James Cameron (already linked in summary)
 * Done. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
 * "[...]expresses anger that they stole his idea, expressing the idea that[...]" -> can you reword that so it isn't back-to-back "expresses"
 * Done. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
 * Delink Smurfs (same as above)
 * Ok. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
 * Can you merge the second and first paragraphs? It seems a little abrupt as is.
 * No problem. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

Reception

 * Can you split it up into two or more paragraphs?
 * I split the ratings info and reviews info into two paragraphs. The ratings one is a bit short, but I think this is the most natural way to do it. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
 * Remove the "the" before Nielsen Ratings
 * Ok. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

Images

 * File:Cartmanchalk.jpg has a fine FU rationale, but needs to be of lower resolution.
 * Better? —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  00:18, 10 January 2010 (UTC)

Final say

 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Excellent work!! I'm going to pass this article. Cheers,  The Flash  {talk} 01:53, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Excellent work!! I'm going to pass this article. Cheers,  The Flash  {talk} 01:53, 10 January 2010 (UTC)
 * Excellent work!! I'm going to pass this article. Cheers,  The Flash  {talk} 01:53, 10 January 2010 (UTC)