Talk:Danganronpa: Unlimited Battle/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cognissonance (talk · contribs) 06:04, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

Unlimited Battle! ..."ceased operations in November 2015..." Cognissonance (talk) 06:04, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * "similarly to billiards" — Fix grammar: "as with billiards".


 * "confined arena area" — Coincide with Gameplay: "confined arena-like area".


 * "one noted that the game retained the style of the previous games in the series, however," — Improve flow: "one noted however that the game retained the style of the previous games in the series".

Gameplay

 * Remove a repeated billiards link.


 * "in a billiards-like fashion" — Minimize repetition: "like billiards".


 * "After a certain number of turns had passed" — Minimize repetition: "With a certain number of turns passed".


 * "As the player defeated enemies, the enemies would drop two types of items" — Simplify: "Defeated enemies would drop two types of items".


 * "of the player's character" — Simplify: "of the player character".
 * Well, "player character" makes it sound like it's the player's avatar or whatever - the character representing them, or the character they control - which doesn't seem to be the case with the characters in DR:UB. Anyway, changed it to "their characters".

Release and reception

 * The section should be written in past tense.


 * "found the game fun and requiring skill and strategy" — Clarify: "found the game fun, requiring skill and strategy".


 * "why Spike Chunsoft would chose a game known for "story of entrapment and murder mystery" as a game for a touchscreen action game" — Fix grammar and clarify: "why Spike Chunsoft would choose a series known for "story of entrapment and murder mystery" to make a touchscreen action game".
 * ✅, but I went with "as the base for" rather than "to make".


 * Write the prefixes A at B with variation.

Overall

 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall: Ping me when you're done / have questions.
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Cognissonance (talk) 15:01, 28 October 2016 (UTC)
 * I believe I have fixed everything.--IDVtalk 15:24, 28 October 2016 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Good stuff. Cognissonance (talk) 15:42, 28 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Cognissonance (talk) 15:01, 28 October 2016 (UTC)
 * I believe I have fixed everything.--IDVtalk 15:24, 28 October 2016 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Good stuff. Cognissonance (talk) 15:42, 28 October 2016 (UTC)