Talk:Daniel McBreen/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Royroydeb (talk · contribs) 08:00, 9 July 2015 (UTC)

RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:59, 14 July 2015 (UTC)
 * after his father took up an offer to play football for Edgeworth Eagles. - Which year? /How old was McBreen?
 * Well, in 1977 when he was six weeks old...! Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
 * debut later that year - later?
 * Removed. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
 * and scored six goals from 23 appearances - 6 goals from 23 appearances
 * Per WP:NUMERAL, "Integers from zero to nine are spelled out in words". Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
 * making 38 appearances but only scoring eight goals,
 * See above. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
 * came in November 2006 - only November is enough
 * Per WP:CONSISTENCY and WP:STO, I always add the year to any dates. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
 * ... after buying out the remainder.... - I think the entire sentence should be reworded
 * Reworded. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
 * seven appearances and one goal - here the number are in words
 * See above. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
 * defeat to Sydney - the club is known as Sydney FC
 * Done. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
 * "He made 31 appearances and scored five goals", " four goals from 30 matches "
 * See above.
 * his contract expired in May 2015. - The infobox still shows him as a South China player
 * Updated. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
 * provides a threat at set pieces. - Isnt it someone's opinion?
 * I guess so, as is the sentence preceding it, but it is cited by a reliable source. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)