Talk:Daniel Santos (boxer)

GA on hold
In a hurry, so I'll point out obvious stuff - sorry :) Leave a note on my talk page when you're done - cheers, Dihydrogen Monoxide (party) 07:22, 23 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Please wikilink publishers like ESPN and BBC. Also italicise newspapers like The Boxing Times ✅
 * "Daniel defended this championship on four occasions" - refer to him as "Santos" ✅
 * "In 1994 Daniel represented Puerto Rico" ✅
 * "Daniel Santos debuted as a professional" ✅
 * "this marked Daniel's first defeat in the professional circuit." ✅
 * "Daniel Santos fought Ahmed Kotiev" ✅
 * "Daniel won the fight by knockout in the fourth round" ✅
 * "Daniel Santos and him was supposed to happen eight years before" ✅
 * "Daniel defended against Antonio Margarito" ✅
 * "and Daniel retained the welterweight championship by default." ✅
 * "Daniel won the fight when referee Joe Cortez intervened in the eleventh round" ✅
 * "On 17 August 2002 Daniel defended this championship" ✅
 * "that they had signed Daniel Santos" ✅
 * "ended Daniel won the contest by unanimous" ✅
 * "to promote Daniel's fights" ✅
 * "03 December 2005." - remove the "0" I believe you fixed that one
 * "where boxing is a common profession," - change to "was" so as to keep past tense ✅
 * "celebrated in Montreal, Canada.[3] Where he won the bronze medal" - don't think you want the full stop here... ✅
 * "against Andre Hawthorne in Fort Worth, Texas.[7] In a fight where he won by technical knockout in the first round." - same again ✅
 * "Santos compiled a record of twenty-one victories" - ref for this being a record - I don't think this is refering to a global record, but rather to his personal record
 * "winnig his first professional championship" - typo? ✅
 * "and it was televised on Showtime Too." - should that be "Showtime Two"? Nope, can't blame me for Showtime's bizarre desicions ;)
 * *eyebrows raise* Dihydrogen Monoxide (party) 00:22, 24 January 2008 (UTC)
 * "the fight Santos' estrategy consisted" - typo, strategy? ✅
 * "On 28 June 2003 he defended against Fulgencio Zúñiga..." - source for this sentence ✅ - I swear that this reference has been on my "favorites" (linked to this article's construction, not really a "favorite") for a while, but it somehow went unnoticed.
 * "Santos was under contract with Warrior's Boxing Promotions for one year his contract ended when he abandoned the promotion." - might need a comma or something here to make it more clear ✅
 * "At the moment of the announcemt Don King stated that: “Daniel is another proud Puerto Rican world champion and I’m excited to have him with me,” promoter Don King said." - you say "Don King" twice. Also the next sentence is a bit chopppy. ✅ I did some tweaks here, the double Don King was there because it went unnoticed in the quote
 * "This event took place in a fight card presented in the Madison Square Garden, against José Antonio Rivera. The contest ended in the eight round when Rivera's corner surrendered by "throwing in the towell"." - wikilink Madison Square Garden and "throwing in the towel" (if there's an article for that) ✅ - There is no article for towel throwing, and believe me when I tell you that my curiosity led me to check this before


 * I am working with the review, my comments will be in bold text, cheers. -  Ca ri bb e a  n ~ H. Q.  08:03, 23 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Passing. Dihydrogen Monoxide (party) 00:22, 24 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Thanks for your detailed review. -  Ca ri bb e a  n ~ H. Q.  01:22, 24 January 2008 (UTC)