Talk:Danny Higginbotham/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 04:32, 24 March 2016 (UTC)

Hi! I will take up this review. Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 04:32, 24 March 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * Loan spell may be linked to Loan (sports)
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Can we have money conversion templates wherever possible in the article?
 * What are they?.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * both the semi-final and the final. Why is only "final" linked?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * but injury meant he missed out on both the semi-final and the final. Could be reworded as but missed out on both the semi-final and the final due to injury.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * What injury was it?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Born in England Why is his birthplace repeated? That too here?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 *  after a long career You can add how many years long the career was
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * We do not generally keep citations in the lead, I would like them just in the main text. And please ensure that all facts of the lead are also mentioned in the main text.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

Playing career

 * but despite passing his eleven plus exam he was denied entry into Altrincham Grammar School for Boys Could be separated into a new line.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * His elder brother His name?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

Manchester United

 * and asked to return to Old Trafford  I think "was" asked would be clearer
 * No, he himself asked to return to the club.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * However he recovered  However, he
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * However following defeat  However, following
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * However following defeat in a play-off game Higginbotham was banned from football for a year for his involvement in an attack on referee Amand Ancion by teammate Ronnie Wallwork Can this be split? It would be easier to read
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

Derby County

 * Duplinks: Denis Irwin, Premier League, Old Trafford, Southampton
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

Southampton

 * Duplinks: Premier League, Southampton
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * on loan until  "loan" can be linked as I suggested in the lead
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * fee of £1.5 million. Money conversion?
 * but was an unused substitute for the final against Arsenal. Source?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

Stoke City

 * an initial fee of £225,000 Money conversion?
 * The Potters went seven games  Have "Potters" been linked earlier
 * How do you mean?--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

Sunderland

 *  fee of £2.5 million, possibly rising to £3 million  Money conversion?
 * Duplink: Premier League
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

Return to Stoke City

 * Duplinks: Premier League, Tony Pulis, Wolverhampton Wanderers, Bolton Wanderer, FA Cup, Newcastle United
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

Later career

 * Duplink: Sheffield United
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 *  After making seventeen appearances Numbers equal to or above 10 are typically kept in digits.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

International career

 * manager, Allen Bula is  --> manager, Allen Bula, is 
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Can friendly be linked?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

Personal life

 * entitled: 'Rise of the Underdog'. -->  entitled Rise of the Underdog.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * His first born child, Jak, was born in 2001 --> His first child, Jak, was born in 2001
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * I think the first marriage and his first wife should be mentioned before the children.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

That should be all. Good luck! Sainsf &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 15:22, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
 * OK thanks! What are these money conversion templates?--EchetusXe 17:45, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the response! I have seen money conversion templates being used in some similar articles, but I am clueless about their documentation as well. It is not a GA requirement anyway, so we need not mess with that. And I was asking if you have wikilinked "Potters" anywhere. Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 18:00, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * OK cool, would you like me to link "Potters" to Stoke City F.C.?--EchetusXe 18:03, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Sure, that should be proper. That done, I would be glad to promote this article. Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 18:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)
 * OK, have done that. Many thanks!--EchetusXe 22:40, 27 March 2016 (UTC)
 * No more issues, I am happy to promote this. Great job! Sainsf  &lt;^&gt; Feel at home 05:50, 28 March 2016 (UTC)