Talk:Danton Heinen/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 21:36, 22 October 2021 (UTC)

Shall review MWright96 (talk) 21:36, 22 October 2021 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
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Lead

 * Wikilink Richmond Sockeyes and Pacific Junior Hockey League ✅
 * junior hockey can be wikilinked to Junior ice hockey ✅
 * "Heinen earned NCHC Rookie of the Year in 2014–15 and NCHC Forward of the Year in 2015-16." - please specify that the years highlighted in bold are seasons ✅
 * The above dashes in the seasons can be replaced by en dashes (–) per MOS:DASH ✅
 * Maybe add briefly Heinen's senior ice hockey career to date ✅

Early career

 * Wikilink Richmond Sockeyes and Pacific Junior Hockey League ✅
 * "While with the Sockeyes in the 2012–13 season, he recorded 63 points" - The Abbotsford News does not mention his points total but Elite Prospects does ✅

Collegiate

 * Dup link for Denver Pioneers men's ice hockey ✅
 * I think the terms goals and assists can be wikilinked to their respective articles ✅
 * "entry-level contract with the Boston Bruins" - how many years would the entry-level contract last for? ✅

Boston Bruins

 * Dup link for Tampa Bay Lighting ✅
 * "in seven of the team's nine games." - little bit too close to the source material ✅
 * "Heinen was selected for th 2017 AHL All-Star Game" - the word highlighted in bold is a typo ✅
 * "He played three games with the Providence Bruins before being recalled on October 26, 2017," - maybe add Heinen scored three assist during his three-game period with the Providence Bruins ✅
 * "described as having a "200-foot game." - described by whom?
 * It says on a third line head coach Bruce Cassidy described as having a "200-foot game." Should I re-word this?
 * Struck MWright96 (talk) 21:11, 28 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "He was also a healthy scratch" - what does this mean? ✅
 * "for two games in October and again the first week of February." - wording of this portion of text is too close to the original source material ✅

Anaheim Ducks

 * Wikilink free agent to the appropriate article ✅

Pittsburgh Penguins

 * "After attending their training camp," - needs verifying with a reliable source ✅
 * Dup link for Tampa Bay Lighting ✅
 * "and he scored his first goal as a Penguin that same night" - don't think the text highlighted in bold is encyclopedic ✅