Talk:Dark Ballet/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 15:55, 19 May 2020 (UTC)

Infobox

 * Needs alt
 * Can you get the cover from a more reliable source? It is also dead
 * The source is from a website only accesible from the United States. I have changed it (since the cover is essentially the same)

Lead

 * Pyotr Ilyich Tchaikovsky. Inspired by the historical figure Joan of Arc → Pyotr Ilyich Tchaikovsky and was inspired by the historical figure Joan of Arc
 * with vocodered vocals → with the vocals making use of a vocoder.
 * that talk about rebelling against the patriarchy. → the vocals talk about this?
 * critics → music critics

Background and composition

 * who served → who was
 * with vocodered vocals → with the vocals making use of a vocoder.
 * vocoder vocals that talk → I understand what you are saying but this is no way of saying it
 * Both of these points have been ✅; "...with the vocals making use of a vocoder and lyrics that talk about..."
 * I ammended the "talking lyrics". MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:51, 22 May 2020 (UTC)

Reception

 * critics → music critics
 * "Kafkaesque" → can you further more? I have no context
 * That was the critic's thought of the song. I have the same context as you LOL, but I have now mentioned he was referring to the lyrical themes.


 * Also negative was → remove as you already mentioned it before

Music video

 * Madonna served as co-director → According to Blanco, Madonna served as co-director
 * Blanco's then seen dancing → Blanco is then seen dancing
 * gold corset similar → gold corset, similar
 * one the singer wore → one Madonna wore

Live performances

 * "Dark Ballet", known then as "Beautiful Game", → any source claiming "Beautiful Game" became "Dark Ballet"
 * ' There are no sources that explicitly state "Beautiful Game" was retitled "Dark Ballet", but the Billboard'' source cites the lyrics
 * Take a look at the first Idolator souce on the article. The one I told you to wikilink. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:50, 22 May 2020 (UTC)


 * did a choreography → perhaps "performed a choreography" ?
 * Madame X Tour → run years?
 * I think the phrase "that same year..." after mentioning the 2019 Eurovision contests implies the year the tour began (2019), there's no need to repeat it. But let me know
 * Sure, but when it ended?
 * Mentioned in the lead paragraph
 * Why not here? MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 20:46, 22 May 2020 (UTC)


 * In one point → At one point

Credits and personnel

 * If there is no more information available.
 * There is not. Same as "God Control".
 * Remove the Gfenius source, it is no t reliable for this, use liner notes, Tidal...never Genius for this

Charts

 * See and use Template:Single_chart
 * I don't really understand how that template works; would you mind explaining? --Christian (talk) 15:50, 21 May 2020 (UTC)
 * You remove what you have and copy like its there. I can't explain more than that MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 17:37, 21 May 2020 (UTC)
 * A fellow user helped me, hope it's OK--Christian (talk) 18:33, 21 May 2020 (UTC)

Overall

 * Don't address any comments until I say so. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:54, 19 May 2020 (UTC)
 * There is a huge problem with copyright violations. NME, NewNow Next and CNN. Needs to be re-writen using your own words. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:16, 21 May 2020 (UTC)
 *  May I know the percentage of copyright violation?? CNN and NME are literally just one quote (both reviews of the song/video), and I'm sorry but I don't see the problem with NewNowNext as I didn't copy-paste anything (unless you're talking about the quotes featured on the video. those cannot be rewritten "in my own words")--Christian (talk) 21:22, 21 May 2020 (UTC)
 * ' I have noticed the problem: some quotes from the article: Madonna's explanation of the song that I took from Rolling Stone'', the quotes from the music video and other small stuff - i.e "inspired by Joan of Arc", "music video directed by Emmanuel Adjei" - are repeated on those articles (CNN, NewNowNext, NME). What do you suggest I do? --Christian (talk) 21:35, 21 May 2020 (UTC)
 * You don't need to re-write everything, but there is always a way of re-write stuff, she is not clamiming something you can't say in other words. For instance, she explained: "[Joan of Arc] fought the English and she won, still the French were not happy [...] Still they judged her. They said she was a man, they said she was a lesbian, they said she was a witch, and, in the end, they burned her at the stake, and she feared nothing. "." → she explained that even after Joan of Arc won the fight against the English, the French were not pleased and "judge her". They affirmed she was a man, a lesbian, a witch, and "burned her at the stake", despite her being fearless. Madonna concluded, "I admire that". Something in this vein. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 13:13, 22 May 2020 (UTC)
 * It is all done ! Thank you for the advice, I will definitely put it to use on future articles!!--Christian (talk) 14:00, 22 May 2020 (UTC)