Talk:Darker than Black/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TeenAngels1234 (talk · contribs) 18:51, 12 August 2021 (UTC)

I'm gonna review this. Stay tuned.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 18:51, 12 August 2021 (UTC)

Let's go.
 * "....and animated by Bones". I think it's pretty clear, but maybe it's better to specify that Bones is an animation studio.
 * Done.
 * I don't like parentheses. I would write: "a spatial anomaly named Heaven's Gate", "People with special abilities known as Contractors".
 * Done
 * "...and created Wolf's Rain". Is this significant?
 * Revised
 * "...and aspects of Hei's personality are developed in later episodes". This confuses me, because we talked about reception just before. Wouldn't another sentence be better? Like: "and the critics praised Hei's personality"? Or something else, anyway.
 * Revised.

Good job.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 12:47, 13 August 2021 (UTC) Excuse me. I was quite busy in RL. Ping my name.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 13:22, 15 August 2021 (UTC) Done. Thanks for the review.Tintor2 (talk) 14:43, 15 August 2021 (UTC) Okay. Let's finish this. That's all.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 14:55, 15 August 2021 (UTC) Revised.Tintor2 (talk) 15:08, 15 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Nothing to say about the Plot. Clear, cohesive, and well written. Good job.
 * "Director Tensai Okamura cited a number of influences, including the concept of a ninja-type spy working for Tokyo". Is it correct to speak of "influences" here? That sounds like the initial idea to me, right? Also, since we are talking about a ninja series, I would move the information to the second paragraph.
 * Moved
 * "(impossible with manga adaptations, due to the need for consistency with the source material)". Can you rewrite this without brackets?
 * Done.
 * "The narrative was inspired by Japanese dramas, which were explored in two consecutive episodes". I'm confused. What has two episodes?
 * Revised. Japanese dramas tend to tell stories that take two episodes to finish. As a result, every story in Darker than Black takes two episodes.
 * "The artist had mixed emotions about sexualizing female characters". Sounds superfluous to me.
 * Revised.
 * The paragraph on music is clear and OK. Ditto for Release. My compliments.
 * Done
 * Briefly introduce "Heroes Phantasia".
 * Done.
 * "An Anime News Network reviewer". Can you write the name? Also, are we sure Japanator, Anime News Network and other sites should be italicized?
 * Removed italics. For some reason, the VG project tends to use italics for gaming especially in vg reviews boxes but I can't find such guideline.
 * "suggested that deliveries were better in later episodes". What is meant by "deliveries"?
 * Revised. Apparently, the Funimation dub gets better.
 * 1) Is it well written?
 * A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
 * B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
 * 1) Is it verifiable with no original research?
 * A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
 * B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons&mdash;science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
 * C. It contains no original research:
 * D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
 * B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Good job. Pass.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 17:19, 15 August 2021 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Good job. Pass.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 17:19, 15 August 2021 (UTC)
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Good job. Pass.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 17:19, 15 August 2021 (UTC)