Talk:Darvin Moon/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 19:42, 19 January 2010 (UTC)

I'll do the full review shortly. To start off, by chance I found a pretty sizeable issue:
 * The quote box and the ref don't match up; I read the reference but the quote's not in there. I distinctly remember Chad saying this though, so I'm sure a different ref could be found for that.
 * I think that's in the All In Magazine article, and I probably just put the wrong ref tag. I won't be able to get my hands on that article until later tonight, but I'll address this issue as soon as I get it. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  19:58, 19 January 2010 (UTC)
 * Actually, it turns out, the quote is on that USA Today source. If you click on the picture of Darvin Moon a little flash infobox comes up with that quote and some other stuff about Moon. Is using the source for this acceptable? —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  14:48, 20 January 2010 (UTC)
 * Ah, I didn't even realize you could click on the guys the first time. In that case that's alright. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 05:39, 23 January 2010 (UTC)

Here's the rest of the review: I'll put the article on hold and pass it when the issues are fixed. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 06:31, 23 January 2010 (UTC)
 * WP:LEAD feels a bit short. Expand if you can.
 * I expanded it a bit, let me know if that's sufficient.
 * "Moon taught himself how to play poker, although he first started playing with his grandfather at a young age." The 'although' added in makes it feel kinda odd. i feel the two points could be combined together slightly better.
 * I just changes it to "and". I think that does it, but let me know what you think. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  19:22, 23 January 2010 (UTC)
 * "He started playing around 2006..." Previous sentence then contradicts this one. maybe "started playing frequently" or something similar?
 * Fixed. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  19:22, 23 January 2010 (UTC)
 * "After 18 hours of play, Moon ended up finishing second against Cada when his Q♦ J♦ succumbed to Cada's pocket nines" If you're using the suits for one hand the suits should be used for the other.
 * Done. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  19:22, 23 January 2010 (UTC)
 * "Storms Reback said Moon was "out of his league" at the tournament," since there's no wikilink for storms, a quick mention of who he is should be added.
 * I mentioned that he was a writer for All In Magazine earlier in the article, so I thought it was covered. But I've added it again. —  Hun ter   Ka  hn  19:22, 23 January 2010 (UTC)
 * Somehow I missed that first one. In that case you can remove that second one, nevermind. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear
 * Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 21:53, 23 January 2010 (UTC)