Talk:Dauphin's Cavalry Regiment/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 15:02, 2 October 2021 (UTC)

I'll give this a go. ♦ jaguar  15:02, 2 October 2021 (UTC)


 * The lead is too short per WP:LEAD and would benefit from expansion to summarise the article
 * "was to be recognised as his (thereby being part of France)" - remove these brackets and just add a comma
 * "these regions (among others) were handed over to France" - I'd remove this entirely. Also, would ceded instead of 'handed over' be better?
 * "handed over to Louis de Bourbon, Dauphin of France (heir to the French throne)" - again remove these brackets and insert a comma
 * The Franco Dutch War section is missing a hyphen (Franco-Dutch War)
 * "In yet another effort by Louis XIV to fortify and security France's borders" - secure
 * "tan small clothes and pants" - trousers?
 * "and saddle (with orange trim (with a black dashed line through the middle))" - remove all these brackets, it'll be fine in prose
 * "At the beginning of the Revolution" - this has already been linked (combat subsection)

That's all I have once again. I enjoy reading these. I'll put this on hold. ♦ jaguar  20:09, 2 October 2021 (UTC)


 * Changes made, if you have anymore make sure you tag me J-Man11 (talk) 20:50, 2 October 2021 (UTC)

♦ jaguar  20:59, 2 October 2021 (UTC)