Talk:David Alcaide/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 13:08, 7 September 2019 (UTC)

Comments That's enough for my opening thoughts, it's on hold. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 09:37, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "pool" is piped to a redirect in the opening sentence.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * " the event in 2017" make it "the 2017 event" so you can avoid an easter egg link.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "semi-finalist having reached the semifinals" hyphen or not?
 * reworded Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "the first ever Spanish player to" no need for "ever".
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * " plays fellow cue sport snooker" really no need for "fellow cue sport".
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Where is date of birth referenced?
 * added a sentence in the prose Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * " twice in both" no need for "twice" or "both".
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * " aged 5," five. And the latter age -> fourteen.
 * aren't ages always numbers? I thought someone had told me that before. MOS:NUM says: Comparable values should be all spelled out or all in figures, even if one of the numbers would normally be written differently: patients' ages were five, seven, and thirty-two or ages were 5, 7 and 32, which is why I wrote this like this Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * No, ages aren't always numbers. But you're right about the comparable values.  Since we usually write out numbers less than 10 or those which can be written in one/two words (e.g. fourteen, thirty-two) then I've always opted for words.  The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 11:19, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Perhaps to add some detail about his date and place of birth in the prose rather than just in the lead/infobox.
 * see above ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "the Spanish Open in" why italics?
 * Who knows? ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Second sentence of "Nine-ball" section is massive, needs chopping up.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "and then later during" well he can't make his "first breakthrough" twice so this needs rework.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Lee Van Corteza - our article has it with two n's in Vann.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * See previous reviews for comments on linking, hyphenating: double-elimination tournament etc.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "Alcaide would lose " "lost". A few of these...
 * I have a tick, I swear. Deleted ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * I would merge the first two paras of the "Nine ball" section as they are closely related and the second para is way short.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "last of the event, seeing the event" repetitive.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "Alcaide would not represent" -> did not.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Probably worth noting the result of the 2017 Mosconi Cup too. Should the tie and win in the Mosconi Cup be listed in his honours?
 * The win, yes, the tie - not so much. The result was in the prose ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Fong-Pang-> Fong-pang.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Jung-Lin-> Jung-lin.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * No need to relink Van(n) Corteza.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "Alcaide would repeat ..." too many run-ons here too.
 * fixed ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "Alcaide represented Spain" has represented, unless I suppose he's certain never to do it again.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "Malaga" diacritic consistency please.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * "Bronze Medalist"/"Bronze Medal" why the over-capitalisation?
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Ref 23 marked as permanently dead so needs replacing.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Avoid SHOUTING in the refs.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Avoid repeating the source of the reference in the ref title.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Avoid spaced hyphens in the ref title.
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Be consistent, is it AZ Billiards, or AzBilliards or azbilliards.com?
 * ✅ Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * I think I got through all of these Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:29, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Added a reply above. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 11:19, 9 September 2019 (UTC)

Any reason why "2009 Predator International Ten-ball Tour – Portugal[34]" isn't mentioned in the prose? The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 11:30, 9 September 2019 (UTC) And which is it in 2009, Italian or Treviso? The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 11:45, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * I have added a little bit about this - the tour was barely much of a thing, but he did win it Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:59, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Strictly speaking, both names are used, but I've been consistent now. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:59, 9 September 2019 (UTC)


 * Happy now, promoting. Good work again (I made a few more tweaks, but nothing major).  Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 12:54, 9 September 2019 (UTC)