Talk:David Beckham Homme/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 05:07, 6 January 2013 (UTC)

I'll review. TBrandley (what's up) 05:07, 6 January 2013 (UTC)


 * "by English footballer" clarification needed, did he design it, create it, develop it?
 * All of the above.  — Statυs  ( talk,  contribs ) 21:16, 11 January 2013 (UTC)


 * "which also included" the word "also" does not seem necessary
 * Well, it speaks of how it includes this fragrance, as well as other projects.  — Statυs  ( talk,  contribs )


 * "reflects" change to perhaps "reflected"
 * ✅  — Statυs  ( talk,  contribs ) 21:16, 11 January 2013 (UTC)


 * Unlink "citrus" per WP:OVERLINK
 * Same goes for "ginger", "pine", and "pepper"
 * I really don't see a problem with linking them. Even if they are fairly common terms (depending on how much you know). I ran the article through "delink common terms" and it didn't unlink them.  — Statυs  ( talk,  contribs ) 21:16, 11 January 2013 (UTC)


 * Avoid short two sentences paragraphs for readability
 * ✅  — Statυs  ( talk,  contribs ) 21:16, 11 January 2013 (UTC)


 * Due to the article's size, perhaps one paragraph should be removed from the lead, per WP:LEADLENGTH
 * ✅  — Statυs  ( talk,  contribs ) 21:16, 11 January 2013 (UTC)

TBrandley (what's up) 17:24, 11 January 2013 (UTC)


 * It has been 8 days since I have fixed these issues.  — Statυs  ( talk,  contribs ) 09:12, 19 January 2013 (UTC)