Talk:David DeJulius/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: BritneyErotica (talk · contribs) 19:17, 17 August 2023 (UTC)


 * Good to see changes being made. You're definitely correct in your assessment that I'm from a different part of the world where American English is not used. Likewise, basketball is not at the forefront of sports played and I have yet to hear that used for any other sport. I read into it more and it does seem to be terminology used so you're right in not needing to change it. It shouldn't be too much longer before a final assessment is made. BritneyErotica (talk) 05:47, 19 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Some final recommendations:
 * “Then, DeJulius got an offer and gave a verbal commitment on December 22”
 * I feel like the “then” could be removed. There is another instance later on that used "Then," and it works a bit better because it’s following on from specific parts of the mentioned game.
 * Done.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:24, 27 August 2023 (UTC)


 * In this case he performed on December 17, then got an offer on December 22.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:35, 19 August 2023 (UTC)
 * I’d Wikilink "Yahoo! Sports" just to establish that it’s the name of the publication. I doubt anyone would be confused by it but having the exclamation mark separating it could be confusing. The italicised names throughout the article look good as they seem to be consistent with a type of newspaper/periodical as per MOS:ITALICTITLE.
 * I’d Wikilink "Yahoo! Sports" just to establish that it’s the name of the publication. I doubt anyone would be confused by it but having the exclamation mark separating it could be confusing. The italicised names throughout the article look good as they seem to be consistent with a type of newspaper/periodical as per MOS:ITALICTITLE.


 * Done.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:36, 19 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Copyright looks good and so do all the references (you could probably unlink “Mgoblue.com” as it doesn’t lead anywhere).
 * Only three outstanding recommendations left. I'll go ahead and pass this once they've been acknowledged without further comment. BritneyErotica (talk) 06:38, 19 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Only three outstanding recommendations left. I'll go ahead and pass this once they've been acknowledged without further comment. BritneyErotica (talk) 06:38, 19 August 2023 (UTC)


 * What is the third item? May I ask what region of the world you are from?-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:38, 19 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Yes the third one was in reference to the table where I responded to "nation-leading" and provided what the source said as probably the best way to phrase it. This was in conjunction with the previous two points above. Originally Israel but was educated in the UK very early on. Surprisingly I'm mainly in America doing and studying business and law (although obviously I'm still learning the different ways things are said and done). BritneyErotica (talk) 05:11, 20 August 2023 (UTC)
 * @TonyTheTiger I'm happy to pass this as soon as possible as it's been pending for quite a while (partially my fault for being busy).
 * Change 1 (stated earlier on this page): "I prefer the way the citation says it, which is "DeJulius holds the nation’s longest streak of five or more assists, currently on a 16-game run" seems to convey the same message in a more neutral way (instead of nation-leading). Also perhaps include the date, such "as of March 2023" or "in 2023" as this record is subject to change."
 * How about now?-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:32, 27 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Change 2: Red "Mgoblue.com" to MGoBlue.com consistent with other references (Number 11).
 * OK.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:28, 27 August 2023 (UTC)
 * All other reference spot checks look good, and it is written appropriately. BritneyErotica (talk) 16:01, 26 August 2023 (UTC)