Talk:David Evans (RAAF officer)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Nick-D (talk) 04:26, 25 June 2011 (UTC)

Comments
This is a very good article. I've got some comments for areas where it could be improved, but none are major:
 * "a VIP captain" - this sounds rather more glamorous than the job probably was! Something like 'an aircraft captain' would work better
 * You might be right but the duty was transporting VIPs and this is the expression a couple of sources use.
 * Fair enough then - I guess that the job involved extra responsibilities Nick-D (talk) 12:17, 25 June 2011 (UTC)
 * Is there any significance to Evans being "the very last name in the 1947 Air Force List"? - does this mean that he was the most junior officer in the RAAF at the time? (or something else)
 * Yes, it means most junior -- perhaps I'll reword it to that and not bother with the direct quote, eh?
 * I've tweaked the article's wording to clarify that he was a member of RAAF Squadron Berlin Air Lift
 * Tks mate; when I first drafted it there was no specific mention of the squadron in my sources but later it did come up somewhere and I just hadn't fine-tuned it.
 * There's some additional stuff on him in Operation Pelican which I'll add in tomorrow Nick-D (talk) 12:17, 25 June 2011 (UTC)
 * "his duties including an exchange posting with the Royal New Zealand Air Force from May 1951" - do we know when this exchange was completed?
 * Yes, July 1953 -- but I see that might not be obvious as written, will tweak a bit.
 * "Evans also dabbled in politics" - 'dabbled' seems a rather mild term for this - Eden-Monaro is a 'bellwether seat' and candidates put their all into winning it
 * Yes you're quite right; I used "dabbled" in my first draft because he tried it once and that was it but the seat was indeed vital so I'll probably reword before ACR. Many thanks for your review, Nick! Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 05:22, 25 June 2011 (UTC)

Assessment
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Nick-D (talk) 04:54, 25 June 2011 (UTC)
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