Talk:David Fisher (Six Feet Under)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 09:10, 20 September 2010 (UTC) Have worked on language, vocabulary and article flow. Will continue reviewing when I have watched portions of the series yet again. I own all the seasons, need to review a few aspects.

Found this: interesting. In reading the above redirect, this is going to be a hard sell and they may push for a merge. Your thoughts? More links:   notability=
 * LGBT:

Peter Krause, who plays Nate Fisher, mentions a quote attributed to Henry David Thoreau: "One world at a time." Says Krause: "That makes the best sense of anything to bring away from Six Feet Under. Whatever happens next will be as big a surprise as a human life." 

Comment: It seems like you were asking for my comment, but there is no doubt that David Fisher was a huge character and had real societal impact (as much as a fictional TV characer can) by kind of opening the door for a dramatic gay lead who wasn't just "the gay one". And realistically. He is (indisputable) a first. Thanks for the references, but I think they are all already in the article :) --Esprit15d • talk • contribs 15:05, 12 July 2010 (UTC)
 * The article has progressed very nicely! I hope you get your GA status but have a concern about a merge. Best of Luck! DocOfSoc (talk) 08:10, 28 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your support.. As far as the merge notice, it is from three years ago.  I really don't think it is a problem.  DocofSoc, are you even still reviewing the article?  I don't think it's clear if you are or not, and it might be keeping someone else from passing or failing it.--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 14:41, 1 August 2010 (UTC)
 * as per your request "Hello and thanks for your continued input in the David Fisher article. May you please remove the template from the David Fisher peer review? As this article is already under GA review, I would prefer for the peer review to be closed.--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 15:56, 14 July 2010 (UTC)" I removed the "doing," so the first reviewer could go forward with your recommendation. I am under the impression that this removed me from the reviewers and the article could move forward.  If there is anything else  I could do to help achieve your status, please let me know. Best Wishes DocOfSoc (talk) 03:02, 2 August 2010 (UTC)
 * OK, I see the confusion. Previously, you had volunteered as both a peer reviewer and GA reviewer for this article.  I asked you to remove doing from the peer review so the peer review could be closed, and we could focus on the GA review.  But currently, you are still the GA reviewer for this article, if no more than because you began it. If you feel you've done all you can for this article, can you please ask for a second opinion on the GA nominiations page so another reviewer can take a stab at it?  If you still would like to access it's GA status, can you please do so?  Thank you!--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 12:49, 2 August 2010 (UTC)

Will get more assistance of this. meanwhile, these suggestions were generated: You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas.DocOfSoc (talk) 02:10, 3 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Consider adding more links to the article; per Manual of Style (links) and Build the web, create links to relevant articles.[?]
 * The script has spotted the following contractions: wasn't, wouldn't, if these are outside of quotations, they should be expanded.
 * They were all in quotations.--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 15:43, 3 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Please provide citations for all of the s.[?] 3
 * I think the bot mistook the citation templates for fact tags.--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 15:43, 3 August 2010 (UTC)
 * Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a.[?]

Quick comment: There are way too many non-free images for this article. The infobox pic is probably fine, but not the others. Per Non-free content, "Non-free content is used only if its presence would significantly increase readers' understanding of the topic, and its omission would be detrimental to that understanding." Text can easily replace those pics. Ω pho  is  20:21, 4 August 2010 (UTC)
 * The plot-related section is also way too long. It's twice the size of the out-of-universe sections. Ω  pho  is  20:24, 4 August 2010 (UTC)

So... where are we on this review? I honestly can't tell. Is a new reviewer needed? With the way GA is bot run now that's extremely hard to get. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 17:27, 24 September 2010 (UTC)

I'll do a full review of this article over the next couple days, seeing as how no one's actually reviewing it, technically. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 04:50, 28 September 2010 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found with the article:
 * "Nate, Claire and David" First mention of Nate and Claire, so last names needed, with links if applicable in the conception section.
 * Ironically, Nate and Claire are written and linked in in the progression section; can be unlinked since they'll be linked above.
 * "David bonds with Keith's young niece Taylor of whom Keith gets custody after Taylor's mother is incarcerated" feels run-on-ish. Perhaps 'Taylor, whom Keith gets custody of..'
 * The image File:Six Feet Under 'All Alone'.jpg is much to big to be fair use, and that image needs a much stronger fair use rationale, else it should be deleted. Same for File:New Picture (12).png and File:David and Keith's wedding (SFU - Everybody's Waiting 5X12).png.
 * "an affirming but alternative version of image of non-traditional families and couples," This doesn't sound grammatically correct (version of image?); can you double check the quote?

I'll part the article on hold, and will either pass it or fail it by October 4. No extensions, this has gone on too long as it is. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 04:58, 30 September 2010 (UTC)
 * Actually, change of plans. I just noticed that the primary contributor's been gone the past month, and the image issues were brought up two months ago and never dealt with. As a result I'm just failing this now. It was 98% there, but it's gotta be at 100%. When it is, it can be renominated. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 05:04, 30 September 2010 (UTC)