Talk:David Mushet

Tone
The article's tone feels a little off to me. There are many instances where, it seems to me, the article is commenting on the subject. Phrases like "Perhaps unsurprisingly, he was becoming dissatisfied with the limitations of the Calder Iron Works" lend themselves to non-NPOV articles. While this style of writing makes for a more interesting biography, it doesn't seem to fit in with other biographical articles.&mdash;C45207 &#124; Talk 23:03, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Pretty confident that I have now addressed this.Obscurasky (talk) 20:35, 22 August 2009 (UTC)