Talk:David Perron/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Nova Crystallis (talk · contribs) 14:20, 20 July 2020 (UTC)

Reviewing later. Nova Crystallis  (Talk)  14:20, 20 July 2020 (UTC)


 * Still a tad bit short of a lead for a longer article.✅
 * Any chance of finding which team he was drafted by in the midget draft?
 * Believe it was Lewiston Maineiacs
 * "In spite of this" WP:EDITORIAL.✅
 * "and participate in the Memorial Cup" Past tense.✅
 * "Midget B level" Not mentioned in source.✅
 * Link John Davidson (ice hockey), Doug Weight, and Doug Armstrong.✅
 * Expand GM out to general manager, you haven't mentioned what the abbreviation meant.✅
 * Be consistent with the use of ellipses.
 * "runner up" Dash needed.✅
 * "2011–12 camapgin" ✅
 * "although the following season would be his last. In his final season with the team, Perron failed to maintain his scoring prowess" A bit of editorializing and puffery, especially with the source only showing stats. ✅
 * Misspelling for Ref 33's title (30 Thoughts).✅
 * "During the preseason games, Perron recorded three goals and four points in three exhibition games." Maybe change it to "Through three preseason games, Perron recorded three goals and four points."✅
 * "Penguins lone goal" Missing apostrophe.✅
 * "Perro said"✅
 * Starting to realize that there's a lot of quotes in the article...
 * Link Ironman Triathlon, Chris Stewart (ice hockey, born 1987), and Ryan Johansen.✅
 * Feels a bit disproportionate to have only four sentences for the 2nd stint with the Blues, are you sure there isn't more info for that year? ✅
 * "left exposed" Unprotected sounds better for this situation.✅
 * "19 point" Plural.✅
 * Link Injured reserve list and Boston Bruins.✅
 * "eventually losing in Game 5." Lost the series in five.✅
 * "an interior designer, have two children together" Not supported by Ref 85.✅
 * AGF on French sources.

That should be it. Nova Crystallis  (Talk)  07:57, 31 July 2020 (UTC)
 * , done! A small part of me wants to bring the references to a nice rounded 100. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 23:21, 31 July 2020 (UTC)