Talk:David Webber (basketball)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 23:12, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

I don't have a lot of comments, this article is in really good shape. Here are my few:

Comments

 * Per MOS:ALLCAPS, the titles of newspapers in the citations should be converted to title case.
 * Done-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:06, 27 August 2023 (UTC)
 * The first paragraph of the lead has four straight sentences that start with "He played" "He was" "he holds". The repetition of "he" could use some improvement.
 * OK-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:56, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
 * The one-sentence paragraph in "College career" should be merge into the previous paragraph. The previous paragraph and he one sentence both relate to CMU.
 * Thx.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:57, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
 * The "Professional career" section should be combined into two paragraphs to break up the short, choppy paragraphs after his NBA aspirations. First paragraph: NBA, second: everything else.
 * Thx-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:59, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Chris Webber isn't linked in the body of the article, even though it is linked in the lead. « Gonzo fan2007  (talk)  @ 23:12, 23 August 2023 (UTC)
 * linked-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:09, 26 August 2023 (UTC)