Talk:Day of Thirst/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khanate General (talk · contribs) 14:03, 9 December 2013 (UTC)


 * Will review in a few days.--Khanate General (talk) 14:03, 9 December 2013 (UTC)

General

 * No disambiguation links.
 * Copyright tags for the pictures look fine.
 * No neutrality issues.
 * No missing in-line citations.
 * No original research.
 * Article is stable.
 * Does the main title need to be in quotes if it's the most common name?

Background

 * Link "conquered" in the first sentence to Muslim conquest of Transoxiana. First time it appears outside of the templates and infobox.
 * Are Mudaris, Wadi al-Subuh, and Baruqan worth redlinks?
 * Is "the East" a reference to the entire Eastern world or just the direction east? If it's the latter, east should not be capitalized.

Expedition against Ferghana and the "Day of Thirst"

 * Appointment is misspelled.

Aftermath and impact

 * If "and the casualties suffered" is a parenthetical phrase, then "were" should be singular because "defeat" is singular.
 * Excellent article with no major improvements needed. Good work.--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 16:10, 15 December 2013 (UTC)


 * Hello and thanks for taking the time to review! The quote marks seemed necessary to me as it is not immediately apparent what the "Day of Thirst" could be about, as it is not a descriptive name (Battle of X, War of Y), but rather a literary one. I have no problem with removing them, however, I will defer to your judgment on this. On linking "conquered", IMO it would be inaccurate to link this with the Muslim conquest of Transoxiana article, because the actual conquest began with some initial attempts in the 670s, and only ended in the 750s. The "conquest" referred to here is that under Qutayba b. Muslim, who is linked. I would add the link using, but the article is currently scarcely of any help to a reader (I hope to rectify that soon). On linking the Mudaris, Wadi al-Subuh, and Baruqa, the first and third have been done, the second is a hapax and not identifiable, let alone article-worthy. The "East"  referred to the Eastern Islamic world, i.e. in this timeframe, Khurasan, so I changed it to the latter. The other two fixes have been implemented. Cheers, Constantine   ✍  12:07, 16 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the corrections and response. There are no major problems with the article, so I'm passing it. Congratulations.--Khanate General ☪ talk project mongol conquests 14:36, 16 December 2013 (UTC)
 * Thank you once again for your time. Best regards, Constantine  ✍  15:59, 16 December 2013 (UTC)