Talk:Dead Island Reveal Trailer/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 20:13, 2 August 2016 (UTC)

Mine. JAG UAR   20:13, 2 August 2016 (UTC)


 * The lead would be better off being merged into two paragraphs
 * "The team also had the goal to show the inevitability and the helplessness of a family in a zombie outbreak" - the development team
 * "The trailer was produced by Scotland-based Axis Animation" - the article says Glascow, so it should be Glascow-based Axis
 * "and the community reaction led Techland" - de-link Techland here
 * "immersion and tone, but it received criticism" - however
 * "According to Techland, it is a game about killing zombies, not a game focused on delivering an emotional experience" - this sounds like it's still anticipating the game, but it was released in 2011. I'd change it to past-tense
 * "The team worried that the action and violence featured would seem excessive" - was worried. Also, can this paragraph be merged into another? It's choppy
 * There's a citation needed tag in the Reception section
 * "Keith Stuart from The Guardian compared it favourably" - does this article use American or British English? Should be consistent
 * Rename "Plot of the trailer" to just "Plot"
 * No dead links
 * Dab links OK

Quite decent. On hold until all are addressed. JAG UAR   20:21, 2 August 2016 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the review! I have fixed the issues mentioned above. AdrianGamer (talk) 03:35, 3 August 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks! This is good to go now.  JAG  UAR   13:13, 3 August 2016 (UTC)