Talk:Deafness in Nicaragua

Language Emergence section
PEER REVIEW: KELLY OBRIEN In the "Language Emergence" section of your article, what is the main or official sign language of Nicaragua? Is there one? Maybe add if there is/isn't one. Do they have a name/s for the sign language that they have? Where did it originate from and from who? Kelly0br (talk) 16:10, 13 October 2022 (UTC) Great job adding information about their own homesigns! Beautifully said steps of ow the languages emerged. I feel like you could add more of how the language changed to now. Is it official? Do they have books, dictionaries, and other resources of the sign language? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kelly0br (talk • contribs) 19:59, 25 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Initial graded feedback:
 * Much improved! It would also be appropriate to note that NSL was the first case where scientists documented the emergence of a brand-new language, which makes it extremely significant scientifically.
 * Minor note: When you're referring the name of a sign language, those words are capitalized (e.g. Nicaraguan Sign Language).
 * Current score: 2.25/3 Matthall.research (talk) 21:34, 22 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Final graded feedback:
 * Edits noted and appreciated! Links to other wiki articles (e.g. the main article on NSL) would have made this a 3.  New score: 2.75/3 Matthall.research (talk) 19:51, 5 December 2022 (UTC)

Significant Organizations section
Initial graded feedback:

Very nice! My only comment here is that since Nicaragua is a member of the World Federation of the Deaf (https://wfdeaf.org/who-we-are/members/), that means that there must be at least one Deaf-led organization there, since that's a requirement of membership. Can you identify what that organization is?

Current score: 2.75/3 Matthall.research (talk) 21:37, 22 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Final graded feedback:
 * Thanks for the update! New score: 3/3 Matthall.research (talk) 20:01, 5 December 2022 (UTC)

PEER Review: Kelly Obrien This section is very organized and I love the bolded section to highlight the different organizations. For the Bainbridge Association, do they have any services, or provide any hearing technologies? The Mayflower Medical Outreach is a great organization. It seems that it helps the people in Nicaragua. The Advocacy Network or Nicaraguan Deaf Education (ANNDE) is also great but are the professionals that support them deaf or hard-of-hearing like you mentioned in the Bainbridge Association.

Language Deprivation section
Initial graded feedback:

The first paragraph is excellent. I'm inclined to recommend adding another sentence or two making the point that because humans learn language best during the 0-5 years, this means that most DHH children in Nicaragua don't have an opportunity to learn language, which means they experience language deprivation. You would just need to provide evidence in support of those assertions: the recommended readings should be helpful there.

The second paragraph provides more detail than is necessary, I think. I would recommend summarizing more coarsely, focusing on the notion that the longer DHH children went without access to NSL, the more trouble they had understanding other people's mental states.

Current score: 2.5/3 Matthall.research (talk) 21:43, 22 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Final graded feedback:
 * No significant changes noted; score remains 2.75/3 Matthall.research (talk) 20:16, 5 December 2022 (UTC)

PEER REVIEW: KELLY OBRIEN This section is beautifully written. The data being displayed and it being explained and supported is great. I would add information about how early education is very important and that the language may be delayed due to the lack of language/communication. The 22 participant test was a great addition to the paragraph to explain the difference between education level. However, if you added information about how communication is retained when a child is young, it could add more of how Nicaragua may be language deprived. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kelly0br (talk • contribs) 20:13, 25 October 2022 (UTC)

Early hearing detection & intervention
Something is better than nothing, but this isn't very much! Sources are needed to support the claim of no UNHS and no early intervention. Score: 1/3 Matthall.research (talk) 20:17, 5 December 2022 (UTC)

Primary & Secondary Education
I would have organized this section a little differently, leading with the bigger-picture stats and moving to the details, but the section as a whole is strong, with only a few minor issues. For instance - what is the relevance of the first sentence? Also, it's not clear whether you're saying that Nicaragua is struggling to implement inclusive education, or whether the implementation of inclusive education means that DHH students in mainstream environments struggle to learn. Otherwise, very nice! Score: 2.75/3 Matthall.research (talk) 20:36, 5 December 2022 (UTC)

Employment
This is fine, although at this point I'm getting a *little* concerned about how much of your info is coming from a single source. (That said, it's a very good source.) An exemplary section would include information about protections under the law (or lack thereof), and efforts to create change on this front. Score: 2/3 Matthall.research (talk) 20:38, 5 December 2022 (UTC)

Healthcare
I'm puzzled by this section's emphasis on hearing. By this point in the course, you should understand that deafness is not a disease. This content belongs in the section on early hearing detection & intervention. The part about HIV/AIDS is relevant here, but that does not make for a very robust section. Score: 1/3 Matthall.research (talk) 20:40, 5 December 2022 (UTC)

Language preservation & revitalization
Good work: all the essentials are here. Score: 2/3 Matthall.research (talk) 20:41, 5 December 2022 (UTC)

Higher Education
Oops, I skipped past this above: very nice work here! I appreciate the broad lens and the attention to structural factors. Score: 3/3 Matthall.research (talk) 21:04, 5 December 2022 (UTC)