Talk:Dean Benedetti

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Umm, I'm anonymous and just talking to say this article is extremely messed up. This guy sold records in 1988 but died in 1957? Huh?


 * I gave it a shot at making the page a bit less dumb. There's some caveats with that statement: it's my first edit, I've no expertise in the subject matter (I've totally read a book about jazz history once, and even saw part of Ken Burn's Jazz series!), and the source feels like a brief summary of materials apparently only found with the public release of the materials themselves, a $115 dollar box set of the recordings. Also I'm horribly verbose and terrible at writing formal English.


 * The original article seems to have skimmed the source and combined the two portrayals of Benedetti. Ross Russell's portrayal of him is, as verified by the source, inaccurate in many ways. I couldn't work that material into the article well, so I didn't. I suspect the notability of the portrayal is high enough that it should eventually be included (his portrayal being an aspect of the recording's myths, along with any notability the biography as a whole brings to the subject at hand), but I'm hoping someone with more experience can integrate that part.


 * Beyond that, I've removed the remark about Parker and Benedetti being band mates. They weren't, although the recordings themselves do include the two playing together. I wikilinked a few things like the record label they were released on, the disease he succumbed to, and the so far non-existent page for the box release itself. Lastly, updated the source link, it was out of date.


 * Hopefully a little better, but definitely room for improvement still.
 * -Zhekthek (talk) 04:36, 2 December 2008 (UTC)