Talk:Dear Zindagi/GA1

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Reviewer: Bluesphere (talk · contribs) 07:34, 14 July 2017 (UTC)

Greetings, I will give this one a review. This might take me a few days so bear with me. Blue sphere  07:34, 14 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your patience. Here are my comments:

Lead
 * Is Dear Life the movie's official English-language title? If not, then it's not supposed to be italicized. Please substitute it with a lit. and put the English translation of the title, sans the italics.

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 * Principal photography took place in Goa and Mumbai. Why not complete this sentence by adding the dates it began and ended shooting?

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Plot
 * The film is set in Mumbai and Goa. Either you remove this entirely or just use it as a dependent clause (without wikilinks) for the sentence Kaira is a promising cinematographer who wishes to direct her own films. (i.e. In Mumbai and Goa, Kaira is a promising cinematographer...)

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❌ Please illustrate an example.
 * The movie ends with a viewing of Kaira's short film... Don't say "the movie ends", nor write in this tense in plot summary. Consider rewording this accordingly.
 * As I said, just state how the movie ends; no need to include "the movie ends". Blue  sphere  13:23, 17 July 2017 (UTC)

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 * He convinces her that she doesn't need to forgive her parents for abandoning her, Avoid contractions in encyclopedic writing per MOS:N'T

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Cast
 * Since some of the names here are sourced, you might as well provide sources for the other players.

❌ You still haven't sourced the other names. Blue sphere  13:23, 17 July 2017 (UTC)


 * Already ✅ All names in the "Cast" section are listed in the fourth source.

Development and casting
 * Can you add something about how the director came across the idea for the film? Is the premise conceived from a personal experience of the director or someone with whom she's well acquainted?

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 * The editing for the film was headed by Hemanti Sarkar. The dialog team consisted of Krishna Hariharan, Gauri Shinde and Kausar Munir. Laxman Utekar was the cinematographer of the film, and Rupin Suchak was the film's production designer. Did these crew members previously worked with the director? If so, then what factors influenced her decision to hire them again in her next film? While we're at it please provide wikilinks to editing, cinematographer and production designer.

✅, except for "If so, then what factors influenced her decision to hire them again in her next film?" because there is no source about it.

Filming and post-production
 * Wikilink for Principal photographying.

❌ Already linked in lead.

Critical reception
 * This section borders in WP:QUOTEFARM, so convert some of the quotations here into prose. The positive reviews of the India section could also use a trimming. Just remove the reviews from Rediff.com, Wion Tv and NDTV; print reviews are more encouraged.

✅ for "Just remove the reviews from Rediff.com, Wion Tv and NDTV; print reviews are more encouraged." but ❌ for "This section borders in WP:QUOTEFARM, so convert some of the quotations here into prose. The positive reviews of the India section could also use a trimming." Please illustrate an example how to covert quotations into prose.
 * Instead of quoting directly from the source, you must interpret in your own words the critics' reaction to the film. Blue  sphere  13:23, 17 July 2017 (UTC)

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And that's it. I'll put this one on hold as you fix these concerns I raised. In case you have questions, you don't need to ping me; I have put this review page into my watchlist. Good luck. Blue sphere  14:20, 16 July 2017 (UTC)


 * Further comments are welcome. Mr. Smart  LION  10:55, 17 July 2017 (UTC)
 * See above
 * All issues fixed. Mr. Smart  LION  08:49, 18 July 2017 (UTC)
 * No you haven't, there's still one concern unresolved. I said provide sources to all the names in the Cast section; and why are the names of the actors added in the Plot section? Please remove them. Blue  sphere  09:24, 18 July 2017 (UTC)

All names in the "Cast" section are listed in the fourth source. Open the link and check out the names. So all names in the "Cast" section are sourced. And as for the names of the actors added in the "Plot" section, please see good articles at Portal:Bollywood. Scroll down the page and check out the good articles. All GA articles have actors names in the "Plot" section. Mr. Smart  LION  15:17, 18 July 2017 (UTC)
 * It appears that I am not making myself clear. Have a look at the article The Hunted (1995 film) so that you would understand what I want you to do with the Cast section. On second thought, the concerns are rather addressed. There you go, Passed Symbol support vote.svg Blue  sphere  15:27, 18 July 2017 (UTC)