Talk:Death of Wishma Sandamali

Thoughts
Hi some thoughts on the article that I couldn't fix on my own: — Wug·a·po·des​ 03:50, 29 June 2022 (UTC)
 * This was despite a 2008 directive from Japan's Immigration Bureau (later Immigration Services Agency) to its facilities to treat domestic violence victims with appropriate care and possibly grant them residency According to the (Google translated) source, it seems like there might have been a possibility that this happened, or at least, it seems that the source hedges this point. Could you double check the source and confirm that?
 * Although her blood pressure and pulse had been undetectable since the morning of March 5, an ambulance was not called until 2:15 pm on March 6 The source is paid, so I cannot access the full timeline. I'm confused about how this relates to the sentence immediately before it which implies that she was found unresponsive on March 6. How is it known that her pulse and blood pressure were undetectable on the 5th?
 * I think the article structure could be improved, but wanted to run the idea past you. I think there can be a "biography" or similarly titled level-2 heading, with "early life" and "detention" as sub-sections along with a new "Death" section; the article is about her death, so having a dedicated (sub-)section would be a good idea. I also think the "Response" section is overloaded. I think it would help to split it into two sections: "Official inquiries" and "responses". Official inquiries would include the ministry report, criminal complaint, and civil lawsuit. The responses section would include the immigration bill and the surveillance footage.
 * Thanks for your comments.
 * I'm not exactly sure what you're referring to, but the source says an immigration official said at the Diet she was not treated as a domestic violence victim even though they were cognizant of her being one (入管庁幹部は国会答弁で、警察から入管にウィシュマさんを引き受けた際、DV被害者であることを認識していたが、DV被害者として対応はしていなかったと認めた). What the source isn't definitive about is whether her visa could have been renewed according to the protocols, I assume because the directive specifies the condition for granting residency to be spousal abuse, which indicates the marital status could have mattered.
 * She still had some activity such as uttering groans on the morning of March 6. According to the final report, bureau officers routinely check detainees' vitals, and her blood pressure and pulse could not be measured on 5th and on 6th. (The source is available in full in the archived version on my end.)
 * I thought of splitting the section about detention too, but I'm still not sure where to. The deterioration of her health is quite relevant to the death, and requests for provisional release and treatment are to the deterioration. The response section is structured like it is for similar reasons. It's kept mostly chronological save for the part about the bill, and each subsection is related to the next (the footage was shown to the sisters right after the release of the final report, and it was preserved in preparation for lawsuits).
 * Nardog (talk) 05:11, 29 June 2022 (UTC)