Talk:Debbane Palace/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Epicgenius (talk · contribs) 19:19, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

Prose, POV, and coverage
Lead
 * First and most importantly, the lead is very short. It is only one sentence and should be expanded per WP:LEAD. For an article of this size, I would expect at least two paragraphs.
 * Though it is one paragraph, the lead is much better now. epicgenius (talk) 15:59, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Though it is one paragraph, the lead is much better now. epicgenius (talk) 15:59, 15 October 2020 (UTC)


 * The title is "Debbane Palace" but the first sentence introduces the topic as "Debbane palace". Please be consistent.4


 * In the infobox, the coordinates should probably be displayed inline as well, because there's a blank line where the coordinates line is.

History
 * who had become Sidon's tax farmer around the late 1710s until c. 1735 - This should probably be reworded because it is a time span. Either rewrite this in simple tense, e.g. "who was Sidon's tax farmer from around the late 1710s until c. 1735", or add a few words before "until", e.g. "who had become Sidon's tax farmer around the late 1710s and held that position until c. 1735".


 * qasr[disambiguation needed] - this should be fixed.


 * He commissioned two of the city's most prestigious private residences to showcase his wealth, a qasr that is now known as Qasr Debbane, - I read past this twice before I figured out that this is the subject of the article. I would strongly suggest rearranging it into chronological order.


 * I would probably combine or condense "Historical background" and "The Hammud ayans" in some way. At this point, there is a lot of context before we get to the history of the palace itself; there are three subsections about the background and family history, and only one subsection about the palace history. But then again, the palace is mentioned in "The Hammud ayans".


 * In various parts of the history section, the palace is also referred to as "Qasr Debbane" and "Dar Ali Agha al-Hammud". Do we know when the names changed, or were these just alternative names? If these were alternative names, I would just standardize them.


 * Is Ali Agha Hammud the same as Ali Agha al-Hammud? Also, does Debbane have an acute tone or not?
 * OK, I see. Thanks for the explanation. epicgenius (talk) 15:59, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * OK, I see. Thanks for the explanation. epicgenius (talk) 15:59, 15 October 2020 (UTC)


 * Debbané foundation - this is capitalized in previous mentions.

Architecture
 * with characteristic architectural features of a house with a central courtyard - what are these features particularly?


 * I would suggest splitting the details of the indoor spaces and the courtyard into separate paragraphs, but it's fine if you don't do that.


 * Any info on how the haremlik was designed?
 * OK, I understand if there isn't a lot of info on this. It's acceptable for GA, but it may be an uphill battle for a higher-quality process like FA. epicgenius (talk) 15:59, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * OK, I understand if there isn't a lot of info on this. It's acceptable for GA, but it may be an uphill battle for a higher-quality process like FA. epicgenius (talk) 15:59, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Collections and exhibition spaces
 * The 16 sarcophagi are currently exhibited in the Istanbul Archaeology Museum - As of what year?


 * Otherwise seems OK for now, though a bit short.
 * Sounds good. epicgenius (talk) 15:59, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Sounds good. epicgenius (talk) 15:59, 15 October 2020 (UTC)

Images and copyright

 * Images are appropriately licensed.
 * A copyright violation check came up clean. epicgenius (talk) 19:19, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

General comments

 * There are a few things that need to be fixed. Most importantly, the lead is not yet at GA quality, but there are also some less urgent issues. epicgenius (talk) 17:11, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

Thank you for your review, there can be 100 issues in the article and 99 of them aren't conspicuous to me but all it takes is one review and it just changes your whole work. ~ Elias Z. (talkallam) 10:37, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Hi did I cover everything? ~ Elias Z. (talkallam) 12:37, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * , thanks for the response. I will check in a bit. epicgenius (talk) 14:07, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Looking over it now, I think this is good enough for GA status. I don't see any outstanding problems, and I'm satisfied with the level of effort put into this article since my comments. epicgenius (talk) 15:59, 15 October 2020 (UTC)