Talk:December 2017 North American winter storm/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 18:23, 23 March 2024 (UTC)

Will take a look at this shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 18:23, 23 March 2024 (UTC)

Prelim

 * Mid-Atlantic (United States) and Northeastern United States are duplicated links in the lede
 * Framingham, Massachusetts is a duplicated link in the final paragraph
 * Article is stable
 * Images are correctly licensed. There are a lot of them, I might consider removing one or two.
 * Earwig reports copyvio unlikely
 * Gone ahead and addressed all your comments here! Looking forward to your full review! :) ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 21:11, 25 March 2024 (UTC)

Lede and infobox

 * "Winter Storm Benji" is a redirect to this page and should be bolded rather than italicised
 * The sentence cited to ref. #2 does not seem like one that should necessitate a citation in the lede. Surely this broad information is also provided in the main text?
 * The regional snowfall index number is not cited in the infobox but does not seem to appear anywhere in main text
 * By my count the cost of the damage does not add up to $1.6 million, but 1.06 million?
 * Similarly I'm counting 699,660 power outages
 * Lede is a little short for the size of the article. Suggest adding more on the impacts at least.
 * The article mentions more than one low-pressure area. Should this be titled "storm" or "storms"?

Meteorological synopsis

 * "On December 7" Obvious, but suggest adding the year here as this is the first date in main text
 * "southwesterly flow" technical term needs explaining or linking, I don't know what a flow is
 * "frontal boundary" as above
 * Ibid "A zone of intense frontogenic forcing" (frontogenic should also be linked)
 * Do we have any background for the storm? Was it expected, and/or do we have any more details on the conditions that caused the cold front etc to form?
 * "surface front" per above, the average reader won't have a clue what this means
 * This is the "North American" winter storm. You mention that the storm headed over to Canada but end the narrative there. Did anything happen in Canada? When did the storm dissipate?

Preparations and impact

 * "Icy conditions led to..." considering this is a multiple day event a date here would be useful
 * Suggest swapping "pileup" for "collision"
 * "second measurable snowfall there" i'm assuming this means second ever, but could be emphasized
 * "which was also the second-earliest snowfall"
 * "first December snowfall since 1948" word missing here, awkward
 * Link hypothermia
 * Link wind chills
 * "for central portions of the state" I know it's in the heading, but explicitly name the state for the start of this (and every other state-based) section
 * ", respectively" comma unnecessary
 * "third-highest snow total recorded there" to avoid "snow" being our word of the day!
 * "prompting emergency department visits" this is very vague, what exactly is an emergency department visit...and what are they visiting?!
 * I don't know whether this is accessible detail, but what is actually causing the power outages?
 * "portions of Interstate 10," should this be a full stop?
 * "preparation for the winter storm"
 * "and there was $820,000 of property damage"
 * "where 15 inches (38 cm) was recorded, which was recorded as the seventh-highest" again just trying to avoid too much repetition of "snow fall", "snow fell", "snow", etc
 * "I-65" you don't use this shortened road name anywhere else, so suggest using the full here as well
 * " Since then, As of December 2023, Birmingham has not since seen more than 1 inch (2.5 cm) of snowfall"
 * "As winter storm warnings and advisories were in effect for numerous counties in Georgia" this wording suggests that the winter storm warnings caused the snow fall, which I don't think is what you intend!
 * "A seven-vehicle crash closed all lanes" on which date? interspersing the article as a whole with some more dates would be useful
 * "In preparation for the winter storm"
 * "A state championship game" which sport?
 * The aforementioned sentence is very awkward and could be reworded. E.g. "Two [sport] state championship games were delayed; one between Wake Forest High School and Mallard Creek High School, and the other between Scotland High School and Harding University High School"
 * Worth noting in main text that the Mount Mitchell snow was the heaviest snowfall of all
 * I don't think it was the "icy conditions" themselves that killed a person on Route 29
 * "near the bridge as well "
 * "Temperatures reached a high" do you mean high or low? Doesn't make much sense to be discussing high temperatures in a snow storm surely?
 * "A level 2/slight risk warning was issued"?
 * What's a "funnel cloud"?
 * "where 9 inches (23 cm) was reported"
 * "Across Maryland, athletic events in Baltimore" it isn't "across Maryland" if you're only discussing Baltimore
 * "consisting with more than 18,000 tons of salt across Baltimore County" this does not make sense. Do you mean something like "spreading 18,000 tons of salt across the county"?
 * What's the difference between a winter storm advisory and a winter storm warning? Do they require people to do/not do different things?
 * "A speed restriction was also implemented"
 * "300 equipment pieces also were"
 * "A parking ban was issued..." this sentence needs to be split up, it's far too convoluted. Try not to use so many commas!
 * "228 motorist assists" what?
 * "incidents of vehicles sliding off roads"
 * "including in Bangor and Auburn"
 * Is there any aftermath for this? Any rebuilding, changes in storm preparation, etc?
 * The image caption "Snowfall in Hiram, which resulted in felled trees across the city" needs a citation; tree felling is not mentioned in main text