Talk:Decoded (EP)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:05, 5 January 2021 (UTC)

I will start on this very soon! --K. Peake 08:05, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * , Thanks! --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:40, 5 January 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Are you sure the EP's release date can't be used for "Gratify" in the infobox since it was released for the song?
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:43, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "released by" → "It was released by"
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:43, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "has six songs written by" → "consists of six songs, which were written by" to be more specific
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:43, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "received a generally positive reception." are you sure this is correct since the source cited in the body mentions widespread acclaim? Also, remove the a and add at the end "from music critics".
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:43, 5 January 2021 (UTC)

Composition

 * Retitle to Composition and lyrics
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Img looks good
 * Good! --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "has six tracks performed by" → "has six tracks, with them being performed by"
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Target pop to Pop music
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Wikilink soprano
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Target 4-octave to Octave
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "Scardey Kat, and The Vivienne," → "Scardey Kat and The Vivienne," since this article is not in American English
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Target dance to Dance music
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Shouldn't Out in Jersey be italicised?
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "and Cook described" → "while Cook described"
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:47, 5 January 2021 (UTC)

Release and promotion

 * "The EP was released on" → "Decoded was released on"
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:49, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "of "A Drag Race Song" on" → "of "A Drag Race Song" as the lead single on" with the wikilink, for being specific because otherwise it is not clear what type of release the song had
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:49, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "included the song in her" → "included the song on her"
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:49, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Target 12" to Twelve-inch single
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:49, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "was released on 26 June 2020." → "was released on 26 June."
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:49, 5 January 2021 (UTC)

Music videos

 * Img looks good
 * Good! --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:53, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "The lead single's music video was" → "The music video for "A Drag Race song" was"
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:53, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "on 4 December," → "on 4 December 2020,"
 * ✅ But I think you meant "2019" here. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:53, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "The visual has tropes" → "The visual features tropes"
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:53, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Wikilink lip sync
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:53, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "and said the video" → "and said that it"
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:53, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "the second single for the album" → "the second single from the EP" with the target
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:53, 5 January 2021 (UTC)

Reception

 * Retitle to Critical reception since that is the only form of reception here
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 16:02, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "The EP received a generally positive reception" → "Decoded was met with generally positive reviews" or should it be widespread acclaim per my earlier comment?
 * ✅ I don't think we should place emphasis on "acclaim" since only one source says so. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 16:02, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Target music critics to Music journalism
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 16:02, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "also called the opening track" → "also called the former" because it is not written out anywhere here that song is the opening track
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 16:02, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Remove target on Billboard
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 16:02, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Remove "on the track" since we already know the reviewer is referencing it from the start of the sentence
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 16:02, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "He said Decoded" → "He said the EP"
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 16:02, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "and showcases the singer's" → "and showcases the drag queen's" because she is not known as a singer; but maybe change to mentioning it showcases her versality "as a singer" or something similar?
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 16:02, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Wikilink electronica
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 16:02, 5 January 2021 (UTC)

Track listing

 * No source is provided for the writing credits
 * Yeah, another editor removed the sources, which I've added back. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:55, 5 January 2021 (UTC)

Reception

 * Retitle to References
 * LOL oops! ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Copyvio score looks moderately good at 30.6%
 * --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Apple Store → Apple Music (AU) on ref 1
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Cite AllMusic as publisher instead for ref 2, removing the other one
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Apple Store → Apple Music (GB) on refs 7, 11 and 13
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Remove the publisher from ref 8
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Cite AllMusic as publisher instead for ref 14
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)

Final comments and verdict

 * until the issues are fixed, but I must comment that you do have some good writing skills for sure! --K. Peake 09:55, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * , Thanks! --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:59, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * My pleasure to have took on this review for you and also have received such a timely response; I did some copy editing for areas where I did not request changes to be implemented during the review because they did not arise properly until you had made the suggested edits. ✅ now after my contributions to your already strong work! --K. Peake 16:12, 5 January 2021 (UTC)