Talk:Deficiency of RbAp48 protein and Memory Loss

Hi! My name is Tuan Nguyen. I wrote this page as a project so that I can learn more about the recent finding regarding memory loss. Scientist found that a single protein is responsible for memory loss in aged adult and Alzheimer patients. This page was developed as part of Georgia Tech's Neuroscience class. tnguyen306 (talk)

Wiki Article Critique (Applies to Last Version before November 19)

1. Quality of Information: 2

2. Article size: 2

3. Readability: 1

some of the information still seems to be in outline form

4. Refs: 2

5. Links: 1

it's still an orphan article

6. Responsive to comments: 1

there haven't been any comments

7. Formatting: 2

8. Writing: 2

9. Used real name or has real name on User TALK page: 1

real name is not on the talk page

10. Outstanding?: 2

has plenty of interesting figures and includes multiple clinical studies and information on the protein interactions and is very well references

Thank you for providing me with feedback. I just corrected some of the outline words and added my real name of my user talk page

Tnguyen306 (talk) 00:13, 12 December 2013 (UTC)

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Total: 16 out of 20

Ana Minchew (talk) 18:52, 22 November 2013 (UTC)

Wiki Article Critique: 1. Quality of Information: 2

2. Article size: 2

3. Readability: 1 (Needs to expand on the bullet points at the end. Adding links would also be helpful there)

4. Refs: 2

5. Links: 2 6. Responsive to comments: 1 (Has not responded to removing the orphan page status)

7. Formatting: 1 (the introduction should be before the table of contents)

8. Writing: 2

9. Used real name or has real name on User TALK page: 1 (Real name is missing from the talk page)

10. Outstanding?: 2

Total: 17/20 Thank you for letting me know what i have to do. I already expanded the CREEB section and removed the orphane page notice as recommended.

Tnguyen306 (talk) 00:13, 12 December 2013 (UTC) Final comment: The article seemed thoroughly researched and was well organized.

- Dmodi6 (talk) 04:16, 23 November 2013 (UTC)

Wiki Article Critique: 1. Quality of Information: 2

2. Article size: 2

3. Readability: 1

Bullets at the end would be confusing for laypeople because there is no explanation of it.

4. Refs: 2

5. Links: 1

Include more links for some of the technical terms that people would not know about such as entorhinal cortex, dentate gyrus, and more

6. Responsive to comments: 1

Has not responded to orphan page status, or the previous comments

7. Formatting: 2

8. Writing: 0

Tense, verb, and grammar issues throughout the article make it tedious to read. many adjectives seem to repeat themselves (ex. very important integral component of transcriptional silencing) very important and integral mean the same thing, so you do not need both there. Sentence fragments need to be fixed as well.

9. Used real name or has real name on User TALK page: 1

Real name is missing from the talk page all that the username includes is last name.

10. Outstanding?: 1

No apparent original media, not a featured article, could be more creative with pictures.

Total: 13/20

Final Comment: Biggest issue overall is going back in and fixing the grammar. If you take care of that the article will be much better off.

Thanks Matt for the valualbe inputs. I already corrected all the grammatical errors ( the one that my friend and I can find). After reading it again, I couldnt believe that i wrote that so thank you. I also added my real name and user talk page on here.

Tnguyen306 (talk) 00:13, 12 December 2013 (UTC)

MatthewMiller71 (talk) 21:32, 24 November 2013 (UTC)