Talk:Delos L. Filer/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 07:20, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments
 * "was a northern Michigan nineteenth" normally we have birth date/death date in the lead rather than this "nineteenth century" thing.


 * "He was an owner of sawmills and related businesses. He was a physician" -> "He owned ..., and was a physician..."


 * "public schools for his initial training when he grew up." link public school. What does "when he grew up" add?


 * "New York District School' link?


 * " $12,443" probably nearest $100 is sufficient.


 * Spouse names are normally listed, along with the periods of marriage, in the infobox.


 * "2,500 acres of land three miles " convert.


 * "It contained mostly timber" well presumably the land contained trees, not timber at that time?


 * "shingles" and "lath" what are they?


 * "married 3 times" three.


 * "His first married in" grammar fail.


 * Some name abbreviations have a full stop, some don't.


 * "of Milwaukee. The" later, you overlink Milwaukee but there you put Wisconsin, so that should go here and the subsequent use of Milwaukee won't need linking or the state.


 * "the South and West" why capitalised? Where do these relate to?


 * Bibliography doesn't need those line returns between each bullet.


 * That's all I have on a quick pass. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 08:39, 20 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for review. Will get started on it. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 09:43, 20 September 2021 (UTC)
 * All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:13, 20 September 2021 (UTC)