Talk:Demonstration (Tinie Tempah album)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: WikiRedactor (talk · contribs) 16:45, 13 April 2014 (UTC)


 * General — ✅
 * One redirect link to address.
 * Three external links to address.
 * Please replaces the usages of "Tinie's" with "Tempah's". (Using his "surname" makes for a more formal, encyclopedic tone.)
 * Please add a "Commercial performance" prose section and "Certifications" table section in the article.
 * I would suggest writing out the dates in the citation templates.
 * Please make sure that every citation has an access date.
 * Done! DepressedPer (talk) 18:35, 18 April 2014 (UTC)
 * Can you expand the "Commercial performance" section with information about the other chart positions listed in the "Charts" section? This would make the section a sold 1-2 paragraphs. I'd also like to see the access dates written in a consistent format, whether it be fully written out or abbreviated with numbers, then I'll be able to mark this section of the review as completed.
 * Fixed it! DepressedPer (talk) 23:52, 19 April 2014 (UTC)


 * Infobox — ✅
 * I would suggest removing the "see release history" wikilink, since the "Release history" section is clearly noted in the table of contents.
 * I would also suggest removing the citation for "Lover Not a Fighter", since it is already sourced in the body of the article.
 * Done! DepressedPer (talk) 05:21, 16 April 2014 (UTC)


 * Introduction — ✅
 * Can you talk about the delays in the body of the article, so the reference in the first paragraph can be removed/relocated?
 * After the "Certifications" section is created, you can remove the UK certification citation in the second paragraph.
 * Done! DepressedPer (talk) 04:15, 18 April 2014 (UTC)


 * Background and recording — ✅
 * Can you clarify that No More Idols is a Chase & Status album?
 * The Chase & Status sentences needs a reference to support it.
 * Done! DepressedPer (talk) 08:54, 17 April 2014 (UTC)


 * Writing and composition — ✅
 * Inspiration and themes
 * Since they are pretty long, can you paraphrase those quotes and marge the remaining content into a single paragraph?


 * Music and lyrical content
 * Can you break this monster paragraph into a couple smaller ones?
 * Can you talk more about the genres you mention in the infobox, because I don't see any mention of them in the body right now.
 * Also, this entire section is unsourced; please add citations for each sentence.
 * Done! DepressedPer (talk) 23:52, 19 April 2014 (UTC)
 * Do you mean to use this YouTube reference for the last sentences of the first and third paragraphs, as well? If so, I'll need you to include it on those sentences.
 * Just the last sentence in the first paragraph. DepressedPer (talk) 01:03, 20 April 2014 (UTC)
 * Disregard what I said above; what you said has been cleaned up. DepressedPer (talk) 01:48, 20 April 2014 (UTC)


 * Marketing — ✅
 * I recommend breaking "Singles" and "Promotion" off into their own sections, and making "Tour" a subsection of "Promotion".
 * Since the insignia is already prominently displayed on the album artwork, the image in this section can be removed; if necessary, you can mention that the label used while promoting the album is seen on the album cover.
 * There is also no source to verify the "get listeners more excited about the track" claim.
 * There are several instances where chart positions are not cited in this section.
 * February has already passed, so please change the "will be released" to "was released" when talking about "Lover Not a Fighter".
 * Can you find a more reputable source than Twitter when talking about the tour?
 * The Ent24 reference seems to remove old concert dates after they pass, so you'll need to find another citation to verify the tour dates.
 * Done! DepressedPer (talk) 04:59, 17 April 2014 (UTC)


 * Critical response — ✅
 * Since the score is 69/100 on Metacritic, I think it's safe to say that the album received generally favorable reviews.
 * Again, can you please paraphrase the longer quotes used and break up this large paragraph into smaller ones?
 * Done! DepressedPer (talk) 17:53, 16 April 2014 (UTC)


 * Track listing — ✅
 * Can you mention that the songwriting/production credits are pulled from the liner notes?
 * I don't think that the catalog number needs to be listed here.
 * Done! DepressedPer (talk) 17:40, 16 April 2014 (UTC)


 * Release history — ✅
 * Can you find individual references to source the releases in Australia, New Zealand, Belgium, United Kingdom, France, and Zimbabwe?
 * You may be interested in moving the references into their own column in this table. (This is purely a matter of personal preference, and certainly isn't a make-or-break deal.)
 * Done! DepressedPer (talk) 18:35, 18 April 2014 (UTC)


 * Spot-checking — ✅
 * Can you find a source other than Twitter for the album artwork?
 * The YouTube video doesn't support the "shake shake shake" claim.
 * The citation given for UK R&B doesn't list the album in the chart.
 * Done! DepressedPer (talk) 08:17, 17 April 2014 (UTC)

I'll check in regularly to see how progress is going! WikiRedactor (talk) 17:24, 13 April 2014 (UTC)


 * I think that the article looks quite nice right now, and I am happy to pass the article. Good work! WikiRedactor (talk) 16:38, 20 April 2014 (UTC)