Talk:Deni Avdija/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 08:43, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

Will be taking on his review as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 08:43, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * Delink Israel per MOS:OVERLINK
 * "he plays the small forward and power forward positions." - plays in the
 * "he joined Maccabi Tel Aviv in 2013, where he shone as a youth player." - more formal; excelled

Youth career

 * "Avdija played football until he entered fourth grade," - how about changing it to association football for ambgiutiy?
 * "Avdija initially competed at the youth level for Bnei Herzliya. In 2013, he joined the youth ranks of Maccabi Tel Aviv." - you could merge these two sentences and rewrite them accordingly
 * "at Adidas Next Generation Tournament (ANGT) Munich." - at the Adidas Next Generation Tournament (ANGT) in Munich.

Maccabi Tel Aviv (2017–present)

 * "he made his professional debut in the Israeli League," - Israeli Premier League
 * "Avdija recorded a then career-high 22 points," - career-high of 22

Israeli junior national team

 * "Avdija led the tournament in rebounds (12.6) and assists (5.3) per game, to go with 15.3 points per game." - with 12.6 rebounds, 5.3 assists and 15.3 per game.
 * "Appearing tired from his previous tournament," - some missing words at the end of this portion of text and lacking in endurance

Israeli senior national team

 * "during 2019 FIBA World Cup qualification." - during the 2019 FIBA World Cup qualification stage.
 * "during EuroBasket 2021 qualification." - the EuroBasket 2021 qualifiers.

Personal life

 * "and her hometown is kibbutz Beit Zera.[1][33][31][34]" - refs should be in numerical order
 * " Sharon Artzi, is Jewish-Israeli, was a track and field athlete and basketball player," - a Jewish-Israeli from Kibbutz Beit Zera,
 * "and her hometown is kibbutz B eit Zera." - this is not need since it will be mentioned in the above point
 * "Avdija holds dual citizenship to Israel and Serbia," - of
 * "while his basketball season was suspended" - the

Israeli League table

 * The minus sign in the PIR column should be replaced by en dashes (–) per MOS:DASH