Talk:Dental care in adolescent Australians

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Table in lead section
A few suggestions for improvements to the table recently inserted by : Here's an example of a table title, if you're unsure how it's done:
 * A title would be helpful, so that the reader knows what those percentages are. Given the preceding text it could be any of fillings, extractions, untreated decay, or the sum of them all.
 * {| class="wikitable"

!State !% Percentage Mitch Ames (talk) 01:11, 6 September 2015 (UTC)
 * +This one line of wiki markup inserts a table title
 * Western Australia
 * 92%
 * }
 * I presume that the figures apply to adolescents, but it probably wouldn't hurt for the table title to say so explicitly.
 * If the figures are adolescents.... If the figures are available, the corresponding percentages for adults, in another column would be useful for comparison.
 * The table probably ought not be in the lead section - it might be better in the statistics section.
 * }
 * I presume that the figures apply to adolescents, but it probably wouldn't hurt for the table title to say so explicitly.
 * If the figures are adolescents.... If the figures are available, the corresponding percentages for adults, in another column would be useful for comparison.
 * The table probably ought not be in the lead section - it might be better in the statistics section.

Fluoridation of Water
The information inserted up front about the 'fluoride generation' is non-factual, and contradicts one of the most comprehensive studies performed on dental health in Australia (Australia’s dental generations: The National Survey of Adult Oral Health 2004–06 by the Federal Government's Australian Institute of Health and Welfare). I will redraft this section and move it to the appropriate place in the article, rather than leading with it out of context. Helenabella  (Talk)  06:43, 19 October 2015 (UTC)

Update: On looking further through this article, I had some issues with the supporting evidence for other statistics (for instance, using citations from New South Wales-only studies, as well as Brazilian, and Scottish studies to support statements about Australia). I've gone a lot more thoroughly through the article than initially planned, in an attempt to improve it and ensure accuracy. While I've essentially tried to keep the original structure, I think it may ultimately benefit from less focus on 'what causes dental problems' and more of a focus on the extent, type, and history of children's dental health care in Australia. Helenabella  (Talk)  09:06, 19 October 2015 (UTC)

Lead
Added a lead to this article Cgord14 (talk) 01:37, 2 March 2016 (UTC)