Talk:Depukhu

Basically, a copyedit request
, as your self-proclaimed mentee, I humbly request you to quickly go over the content and fix the "English" and "NPOV" issues. I will, of course, try to learn from the examples, but additional advice in edit summaries or here, would also be highly appreciated. I want to take this to DYK but am too much of a coward to do so without having a familiar friendly eyes go over it first. I am mainly worried about the prose, I believe I can fix the technical issues myself and will continue to do so. I've never worked on something with potential for this much controversy before, and also have an emotional/philosophical bias on this subject, so please... --  Usedtobecool  TALK ✨ 20:13, 5 November 2019 (UTC)


 * , I made a few minor changes. The controversy seems to be well documented in the sources. However, reading the text made me wonder - is this ritual the entire festival?  Usually festivals last more than an hour.  If there are other activities at the festival (eating, dancing, music, songs, storytelling, selling of crafts or souvenirs, etc.), these should be mentioned to avoid overweighting the controversial aspect.&mdash;Anne Delong (talk) 13:25, 7 November 2019 (UTC)
 * Hiya, thank you very much for taking a look! It's actually a Jatra which doesn't precisely translate to "festival" but all sources seem to use this word nonetheless, for lack of a better word. Closer analogy would be a carnival but not by a lot. It is indeed just a religious gathering of a people to take part in a public ritual followed by a religious procession from which people just go back to their own homes. I am sure there are a few other elements to it. For example, caption for one image used in the Nepali article says a Lakhe dance is also publicly performed as part of the event. Some non-reliable sources also say that the winners of the carcass go on to perform street plays throughout the next year. I am sure that people would eat sweets, and prepare and share elaborate meals (Newars are specially known for their cuisine). Traditionally, a sacrificed animal is later shared and consumed by all participants of the community, I guess that might happen too. But what's in the article is all that there is in the RSes available online (almost an exhaustive search). And, all the rest of the details are peripheral and probably not even really encyclopedic (as it happens in all festive occassions and is even covered by common sense). I am worried about the language I've used to describe the things but I don't think there is a legitimate case to be made for undue weight. What's in the article is indeed the most important, most defining feature of the festival that gives the festival its name.
 * P.S. would you please take a look at the DYK hook above? I know it would probably be considered too negative for a BLP, I don't know if it is also unacceptable when it's a group of people. Or perhaps, I just think it's negative because of my personal bias? Thanks!  Usedtobecool  TALK ✨ 16:11, 7 November 2019 (UTC)
 * P.S. would you please take a look at the DYK hook above? I know it would probably be considered too negative for a BLP, I don't know if it is also unacceptable when it's a group of people. Or perhaps, I just think it's negative because of my personal bias? Thanks!  Usedtobecool  TALK ✨ 16:11, 7 November 2019 (UTC)