Talk:Desire discrepancy

Peer review for the section on age
Hi,

I have peer-reviewed your section on "Age".

Overall, it is very interesting and generally well balanced. It is more comprehensive in some places than others (as detailed below). I would suggest a few things:
 * Your introduction to this section is just a sentence. Explain why age is important in understand human sexuality. You give a reference so perhaps expand on why age is important using this reference?
 * With regards to the paragraph you write about illness... Perhaps spell out more obviously that some illnesses are comorbid with old age. I know the illnesses you refer to are comorbid with age, but some people might not. This will just make this paragraph more concretely relevant to the section age and why you put it there, and not somewhere else. It is also just two sentences, either expand on the content to make it into a paragraph, or perhaps get rid of it completely since it isn't comprehensive enough to meet Wikipedia's guidelines. For example... what sort of effects do these illnesses have on individuals which results in lower sexual desire discrepancies?
 * Your section focuses primarily on old age. Is there a reason you didn't include adolescence, or adulthood? This would make your section on age more balanced to meet Wiki's guidelines.

I also copy-edited your section on "Age" and changed a few things. See the history of the page for exact changes, it was just title of the heading to sentence case, some grammar errors and un-abbreviating SDD at the start of the article.

Hope this helps!!! :) nicolehyare (talk) 16:34, 11 March 2016 (UTC)

Thank you for your feedback! Currently there is no research on adolescents SDD only old age, but I have noted it down on the page and this section will be added as soon as findings are released! — Preceding unsigned comment added by 86.146.100.106 (talk) 14:48, 4 May 2016 (UTC)

Peer review for the heterosexual and same sex couples section
I did some copy-editing of this section with only minor tweaks to some of the wording. Overall, this section was easily understandable and contained a lot of interesting information. I have noted below a few suggestions for improvements: Hope this helps and good luck with the article! SarahH04 (talk) 17:25, 11 March 2016 (UTC)
 * In the heterosexual section, would it possible to add a reason for why males experience higher SDD than women? Maybe look into the influence of testosterone, as this has previously been implicated in a higher sex drive.
 * In the same sex section, you report the results on a large study of lesbians. One of the sentences said this "where a large 78%" in reference to how they have low levels of sex. It may be improved by removing the word "large" as this suggests that lower levels of sex are unusual or negative, which you later claim is not necessarily the case.
 * In the final paragraph of the same sex section you say that lesbians have higher SDD at the start of their relationship, but in the previous parts it appears that they have lower SDD at the start of their relationship so it appears contradictory.
 * Would it be worth adding a section on homosexual males? Would be interesting to compare with the lesbian section.

Understanding the phenomenon of sexual desire discrepancy in couples. Sutherland. Canadian Journal of Human Sexuality. v. 24. no. 2.  2015. p. 141

The impact of daily sexual desire and daily sexual desire discrepancy on the quality of the sexual experience in couples Mark. Canadian Journal of Human Sexuality. v. 23. no. 1.  2014. p. 27

Bridges, S.K., & Horne, S.G. (2007). Sexual satisfaction and desire discrepancy in same sex women’s relationships. Journal of Sex & Marital Therapy, 33(1), 41–53.

Davies, S., Katz, J., & Jackson, J.L. (1999). Sexual desire discrepancies: Effects on sexual and relationship satisfaction in heterosexual dating couples. Archives of Sexual Behavior, 28(6), 553–567

Herbenick, D., Mullinax, M., & Mark, K. (2014). Sexual desire discrepancy as a feature, not a bug, of long-term relationships: Women’s self-reported strategies for modulating sexual desire. Journal of Sexual Medicine, 11(9), 2196–2206.

Mark, K.P. (2014). The impact of daily sexual desire and daily sexual desire discrepancy on the quality of the sexual experience in [End Page 149] couples. Canadian Journal of Human Sexuality, 23(1), 27–33. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Janepatel (talk • contribs) 16:39, 16 February 2016 (UTC)

Mark, K. P., & Murray, S. H. (2012). Gender differences in desire discrepancy as a predictor of sexual and relationship satisfaction in a college sample of heterosexual romantic relationships. Journal of Sex and Marital Therapy, 38, 198-215.

Santtila, P., Wagner, I., Witting, K., Harlaar, N., Jern, P., Johansson, A., Varjonen, M., & Sandnabba, K. N. (2008). Discrepancies between sexual desire and sexual activity: Gender differences and associations with relationship satisfaction. Journal of Sex and Marital Therapy, 34, 31-44.

Murray, S. H., Sutherland, O., & Milhausen, R. R. (2012). Young women’s descriptions of sexual desire in long-term relationships. Sexual and Relationship Therapy, 27, 3-16.

Warren Brown, K., Kasser, T., Ryan, R. M., Linley, P. A., & Orzeh, K. (2009). When what one has is enough: Mindfulness, financial desire discrepancy, and subjective well-being. Journal of Research in Personality, 43, 727-736.

(Severu (talk) 08:56, 17 February 2016 (UTC))

Bridges, S. K., & Horne, S. G. (2007). Sexual satisfaction and desire discrepancy in the same sex women’s relationships. Journal of Sex & Marital Therapy, 33, 41-53.

Willoughby, B. J., Farero, A. M., & Busby, D. M. (2014). Exploring the effects of sexual desire discrepancy among married couples. Archives of Sexual Behaviour, 43, 551-562.

Willoughby, B., & Vitas, J. (2011). Sexual desire discrepancy: The effect of individual differences in desired and actual sexual frequency on dating couples. Archives of Sexual Behaviour, 41, 477-486. Dxmola (talk) 00:23, 19 February 2016 (UTC)

Reece, R. (1987). Causes and treatments of sexual desire discrepancies in male couples. Journal of Homosexuality, 14, 157-172Dxmola (talk) 00:45, 19 February 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review: Desire Discrepancy and Gender
Overall the article is well written, especially in regards to the introduction, which shows a clear understanding and summarizes the information efficiently and succinctly. A few changes could be made to the bulk of the text, which I have detailed below.

Firstly, a small structural change could be made to aid with the ease of navigation. I would suggest splitting the section into two subsections, the former detailing the gender differences, and the latter explaining the reasons. As it currently reads, one would have to filter a significant bulk of information to find what is relevant to them.

Secondly, splitting the bulk into two sections would allow for further expansion of some dominant areas that are lacking in depth. For example, in the first paragraph under the "Reasons..." bracket, you discuss how men and women differ in regards to subsequent involvement from sexual intercourse. Whilst you identify the reason for such differences, further expansion of the section could offer a brief insight into why this has come about. One example could be to look at evolutionary perspectives, possibly highlighting that males have evolved from an environment in which their investment is centered around resources, not child rearing. This could then link in to the latter section in which you discuss sexual desires and briefly touch on the evolutionary perspective. This is just a thought as from reading the article I feel clarity could be improved.

Finally, I would suggest further expansion of the final paragraph in which you highlight that variations in sexual desire are apparent. You've identified this as an important section but not elaborated further. An expansion on this area could offer a more neutral perspective to the article, providing a well rounded page.

As a whole the article is well established and the content appears accurate.

Update: I have copy-edited a few minor areas just to aid with the flow of the text.

--BigPapa1995 (talk) 10:07, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review: Heterosexual Couples
This is a really interesting topic and you have made a good start on this section. It is nice that you split the section into marital and non-marital couples as it makes it easier to read. I have posted a few possible suggestions for improvement and expansion of the section below:

1) You could add references for the first two sentences in the 'non-marital section': 1.Husbands have been found to experience higher sexual desire discrepancies than their wives. 2. Married couples who individually experience higher rates of sexual desire discrepancy exhibit lower levels of satisfaction in their relationship. This would increase the reliability of these statements.

2) In line with a previous peer review, an expansion as to the reasons why men in married couples experience higher SDD could be interesting.

3) In the 'non-marital' section you could include whether men or women experience more SDD when they are in a relationship.

4) Also in the 'non-martial' section you could perhaps include whether relationship length affects SDD, or in other words whether there are any differences in SDD for long term relationships or those which are just starting out.

I also copy-edited this section -I just edited some of the wording to make the paragraphs flow better.

I hope this helps! TashK (talk) 20:56, 16 March 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hi! I think that this is a really interesting topic! I really like the way your article has been structured - you have managed to distinguish the different topics clearly, making it easy for the readers. I was just wondering if you could expand it a little further, by exploring the difference between the two genders, based on the past sexual relationships/experience they have had. D818hy (talk) 18:36, 17 March 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review - Heterosexual couples
Further to the first review, I think this is a very good section, just a little light in a few areas.

1) It may be beneficial to the article to include reasons as to why there is higher discrepancy for husbands, like due to the evolutionary mechanisms that dictate why males feel they need more intercourse for example.

2) Similarly, the article you cited mentioned that there is a difference in DD for married and unmarried couples because individuals see sex as a 'right' once they become married, and so any less intercourse will lead to a higher DD, whereas they see a high DD as a motivation to promote the progression of a relationship in unmarried couples, which I think is interesting and adds to one's understanding of the article.

Other than these small points the section reads very well and the points are well made and easy to understand and informative. Ahhthewitch (talk) 15:04, 18 March 2016 (UTC)Ahhthewitch

Peer Review - Age Section
This was a really interesting article and it was nice how you covered a wide range of topics within this article. I just have a few minor points to edit for this subsection.

(1) In your introduction, simply stating that age is important in understanding human sexuality it may be a little brief. Perhaps you could very briefly outline some of the general effects age can have on sexuality and even the effect sexuality can have on an individual's ageing development/process. Which would then make a nice lead for the rest of your subsection, otherwise it just makes a very vague introduction that doesn't really provide anything insightful.

(2) The 1st sentence of your 2nd paragraph could maybe do with a little clarification. If a change in an individual's age can only result in a decrease in SDD, would it be better to rephrase the sentence as 'There are several reasons for decline in sexual desire discrepancies' ???

I just copyedited a few words for grammar and general sentence flow but besides that a really great, informative and clear article here. Nisep (talk) 23:54, 24 March 2016 (UTC)