Talk:Devdas (soundtrack)/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 19:03, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

I will have this review wrapped up by tomorrow. --K. Peake 19:03, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Remove Feature film soundtrack from the infobox, as that is not a genre nor sourced
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 11:54, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * The release date should be a sentence directly after the opening one instead
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 11:54, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
 * ❌ --K. Peake 07:22, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Is it better now? --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 07:35, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
 * The release date is supposed to be after the opening sentence of the first para, starting with, "It was released..." --K. Peake 09:17, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 09:29, 26 March 2021 (UTC)


 * The two year development part should be mentioned in the same sentence as the one about what the album was based on, but the latter is not sourced
 * Hmmm..? Maybe I have misunderstood you, but do you mean what the film was based on? This album is clearly the work of Ismail Darbar and Birju Maharaj and I did not found any sources that stated it was inspired by anything. --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 11:54, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Yes I did, as I had initially misunderstood the wording of the article... this developmental info should be after the part about the tracks and lyrics. Also, regarding the novel, you should mention that somwhere in the first section actually. --K. Peake 12:28, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:29, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
 * ❌ for mentioning the novel in the body --K. Peake 07:22, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
 * My bad, I remove that sentence to avoid misunderstanding from readers, because the film that was based on the novel not the soundtrack. --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 07:35, 26 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Mention the Bengali novel by name and add (1917) in brackets
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 11:54, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "its screenplay was" → "the film's screenplay was"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 11:54, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "following his 2000 meeting" → "following her 2000 meeting"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 11:54, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "of the soundtrack used several Indian instruments," → "of Devdas uses several Indian instruments,"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 11:54, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
 * You missed changing "used" to "uses". --K. Peake 07:22, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
 * This is the only issue remaining and to elaborate, it is about the instruments that are featured on the album so "uses" is the correct language. --K. Peake 09:32, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I am very sorry because I missed this one. Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 09:37, 26 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Wikilink dholaks per WP:NOPIPE
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 11:54, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * I did say to move the development and release parts but to be specific, the release sentence should start with "It was released..." like the mid-sentence formation here
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 11:54, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Move the highest-selling stat to being the last sentence of the second para
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 11:54, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "received positive reviews; most critics" → "received positive reviews from music critics, who mostly" with the pipe
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 11:54, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "is regarded as" → "are regarded as"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 11:54, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "with several publication listing them." → "being listed as such by several publications."
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 11:54, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * The highest-selling stat sentence should begin as "It emerged as the", plus wikilink Bollywood and change the year to 2002
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 11:54, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
 * The sentence should begin with "it", not "the album". --K. Peake 07:22, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I think "the album" is better, because I have use "it" on the second sentence, but... OK

Development

 * Retitle to Background and development
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "The entire soundtrack and lyrics was composed by" → "The entire soundtrack was composed by" per the source
 * I had wrote respectively there. And... if that's not what you mean, I have added an additional source... --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
 * What I meant was that the source does not mention the lyrics being composed by Darbar, hence me writing "per the source". --K. Peake 17:34, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "with Bhansali after" → "with Sanjay Leela Bhansali after" with the wikilink
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "written by Maharaj," → "written by Birju Maharaj," with the wikilink
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * [5] should be after the background score sentence too due to backing it up
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "were performed by Dixit," → "were performed by Madhuri Dixit," with the wikilink
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "was directed by Sanjay Leela Bhansali" → "was directed by Bhansali"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "and Madhuri Dixit, while" → "and Dixit, while"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "playing supporting roles." → "play supporting roles."
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "to do many research," → "to do much research,"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "the earlier remakes' soundtrack," → "the earlier remakes' soundtracks,"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "after it was eighty percent" → "after the film was 80 percent" per MOS:NUM
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "the last twenty minutes of" → "the last 20 minutes of" plus shouldn't you specific this was Bimal Roy's version?
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "interpretation", and he" → "interpretation" and said he"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Badr (in his debut as a lyricist) replaced Kotwal." → "Badr replaced Kotwal on his debut as a lyricist."
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "served the lyrics for" → "wrote the lyrics for" but add a source here that mentions this, as the current one does not
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Wikilink Bollywood
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "was the first song" → "being the first song"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "and asked her to" → "asking her to"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Paro, which according to" → "Paro; according to"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Every songs—which had" → "Each song—which all had"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Pipe mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music)
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "were recorded in ten days." → "was recorded in 10 days."
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)

Release

 * The Times of India ref should be used for the opening sentence of this section instead
 * "The soundtrack album, which was highly-anticipated at the time, has nine original songs and one background score", this sentence right? I added an Indian Express source. --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:38, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Yes, I am referring to that sentence; the iTunes ref did not back up the anticipation or the classifications of the songs. --K. Peake 17:34, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "even before its release on" → "prior to release on"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:38, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "it emerged as the third-highest-selling Bollywood soundtrack of the year," → "Devdas emerged as the third-highest-selling Bollywood soundtrack of 2002,"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:38, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Should it be "only recover" or "only recovered"; I don't know per not being able to access the source?
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:38, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "of "Top Five Hindi Film Albums" of the year." → "of the "Top Five Hindi Film Albums" of 2002."
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:38, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
 * You missed adding "the" before. --K. Peake 07:22, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 07:35, 26 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "peaking the third position." → "peaking at the third position."
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:38, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Pipe MTV India to MTV (Indian TV channel)
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:38, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "from the song "Bairi Piya"" → "from "Bairi Piya""
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:38, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "He managed music airplays" → "The channel managed music airplays" per the source
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:38, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Pipe behind-the-scenes to Making-of
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:38, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Shah Rukh Khan—on the channel through June and July that year." → "Rukh Khan—through June and July of 2002."
 * Done, expect for the name, I prefer to use Shah Rukh Khan than Rukh Khan because it sounds better. --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:38, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
 * This is fine, baring in mind that Shah Rukh is not the only person with the surname of Khan referenced in the article. --K. Peake 07:22, 26 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "for fourteen consecutive weeks." → "for 14 consecutive weeks." per MOS:NUM
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:38, 25 March 2021 (UTC)

Critical reception

 * "received generally positive critical reviews." → "was met with generally positive reviews from music critics." with the pipe
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "gave nine-and-a-half stars and stated that it" → "gave the album nine-and-a-half stars and stated that it is"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "was "a highlight on screen" as" → "is "a highlight on screen", as"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Indian instruments ..." → "Indian instruments [...]"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "of how it was" → "of how the songs are"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "rated it nine-out-of-ten stars," → "rated Devdos nine-out-of-ten stars,"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "and described its lyrics" → "describing its lyrics"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "were "classical-based"" → "are "classical-based"" with the pipe
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "that the former did" → "that the former does"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Remove television entertainment network introduction to B4U since that is not notable
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "with elaborating that" → "with her elaborating that he"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "had proved her versatility in" → "proves her versatility in"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "In their four-star review, Chitralekha saw" → "In their four-star review, a writer for Chitralekha saw"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Khalid Mohammed however," → "Khalid Mohamed, however," with the wikilink (only the title misspelt his name, the author is listed correctly)
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Pipe The New Sunday Express to The New Indian Express
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * ""[t]he "Bairi Piya" picturisation" → ""[t]he 'Bairi Piya' picturisation" plus is this a full sentence quoted? If not, then remove the punctuation from inside the quote per MOS:QUOTE.
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "... impresses too ..." → "[...] impresses too [...]"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "also reviewing for The Hindu," → "reviewing for The Hindu,"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:47, 25 March 2021 (UTC)

Track listing

 * Move this to being the section directly below legacy
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:51, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Italicise Devdas
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:51, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * The Times of India ref should be used for the track listing too, as it mentions the background score, plus you need to add one of the refs here that verifies the lyrics and music credits
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 12:51, 25 March 2021 (UTC)

Awards and nominations

 * Add a table col for the year
 * I added, which directs to all of awards the film and soundtrack have won and (of course) the dates.


 * Two refs should not be in the same row; change the span of them to only being alongside the awards they back up
 * Umm... What do you mean? The awards table is perfect, I followed this article's style but without adding the dates. Or you mean this? --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:27, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I was referring to the latter but my apologies, it appears the style currently in place is decent so you needn't change this. Also, there are a number of changes that you have not implemented despite marking them as done; should I go through these or will you have another look through yourself to check? --K. Peake 17:34, 25 March 2021 (UTC)

Legacy

 * "performed at the" → "performing at the" on the img text
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Remove speech marks for the tour per MOS:QUOTEMARKS
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "the success of the album," → "the success of Devdas,"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "most popular playback singer," → "most popular playback singers," but she is not sourced as becoming one of the most popular, only gaining popularity
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Pipe National Film Award to National Film Awards
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Pipe Filmfare Award to Filmfare Awards
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Add the appropriate citation(s) to back up the awards in prose
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "with the IIFA Award and Zee Cine Award" → "with the IIFA and Zee Cine awards" with the pipes
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "regarded as one" → "has been regarded as one" but are you sure this part is sourced?
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Pipe Best Choreography to National Film Award for Best Choreography
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * [50] should be after the quote instead
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "performed it at the" → "performed the soundtrack at the"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "added that they had" → "adding that they had"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "in their listing of" → "in their listing of the"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "featured the soundtrack amongst" → "featured Devdas amongst"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "number of all time" by" → "number of all time": by"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Italicise Scroll.in
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Italicise HuffPost
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "2020 listing of" → "2020 listing of the"
 * Done --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 13:10, 25 March 2021 (UTC)

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 12:28, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I have got it all done. --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 21:23, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
 * OK, I have checked it... --Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 02:17, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I left comments in relevant areas above; there are quite a few things you must have missed. --K. Peake 07:22, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, you may have missed a number of points initially but that can be prone to happening for large articles and good job in having everything fixed in under a day's time! --K. Peake 09:39, 26 March 2021 (UTC)