Talk:Development of Red Dead Redemption/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 23:50, 7 February 2015 (UTC)

Should have this to you within 48 hours ☯ Jag  uar  ☯ 23:50, 7 February 2015 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

 * Not at all essential, but would there be a chance of having some sort of image for the lead?
 * "Rockstar Games published Red Dead Redemption on May 18, 2010 " - I think released sound more accurate, what do you think?
 * "One of their studios, Rockstar San Diego, oversaw the work, sharing it with other studios around the world" - what does this mean? Was it developed in more than one Rockstar Studio?
 * "Preliminary work on Red Dead Redemption began in 2005" - this is in the Production section, but I was thinking that something as important as this should also be mentioned in the lead?
 * I would mention that all the places in the Story and setting section are all fictional - it got me going for a minute that New Austin and Nuevo Paraíso were real places!
 * ""[T]here are countryside environments" - why is [T] there?
 * "The trailer was a technology demonstration of the Rockstar Advanced Game Engine (RAGE) and was set in the Old West" - the story and setting states that the game takes place during the transition into the modern world?

On hold
A very good article, this appears to be pure GA material, hence the review feeling a little short. It is mostly well written, comprehensive and the references are in working order. I'll put this on hold for the standard seven days until everything can be addressed. ☯ Jag  uar  ☯ 14:53, 10 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review, Jaguar! I've gone through and fixed most of your concerns:
 * I would also like to have an image in the lead, but I can't think of any that would be suitable. Only a couple of the other development articles have images in the lead, but I'm not sure if one will work here. Let me know.
 * I felt that published would be better, since Rockstar Games is the publisher. However, I'll change it if you wish.
 * I've added a list of other developers in a footnote.
 * I believe the beginning of development (2005) is mentioned in the first sentence of the lead.
 * Clarified that the locations are fictional.
 * The original quote was written as "there are countryside environments", but here it's used as the opening of a sentence, requiring an upper case letter; as far as I'm aware, I can't alter the original quote without brackets.
 * Removed "set in the Old West".
 * If you have any further concerns, please don't hesitate to let me know. Thanks! -- Rhain1999  (talk to me) 20:58, 10 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your response, Rhain, I think that after the changes you have made the article now meets the GA criteria. It was well written to start off with, but passing now ☯  Jag  uar  ☯ 21:14, 10 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Thank you! -- Rhain1999  (talk to me) 21:17, 10 February 2015 (UTC)