Talk:Devil Daggers/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cognissonance (talk · contribs) 13:45, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

After Metal Gear Rising: Revengeance, this will be a breath of fresh air. I'll get to it ASAP. Cognissonance (talk) 13:45, 19 October 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * "the game's visual style reminiscent of early 3D games" — Minimize repetition: "its visual style reminiscent of early 3D games".


 * "The game was released for Windows on 18 February 2016, after being greenlit for release on digital distribution platform Steam" is a copy and paste job from the Development and release section. Rewrite so that it's at the very least a little different.
 * ✅ Rewrote the part in development and release instead.


 * Mention the criticism.

Gameplay

 * "The player character is looking at set of approaching enemies" — Fix grammar: "The player character is looking at a set of approaching enemies".


 * Remove repetition of player character link.


 * "The goal of the game is kill demonic enemies" — Fix grammar: "The goal of the game is to kill demonic enemies".


 * "transported to a flat floating platform arena" — Put a comma after "flat".


 * "a series of tentacled towering creatures spawn and begin to release" — Put a comma after "tentacled" and replace "begin to release" with "start releasing", to minimize repetition of the word "begin". In the same vein, "begin to appear" may be changed to "appear".


 * "survival time is published on global leaderboard" — Fix grammar: "survival time is published on a global leaderboard".


 * "Accessed via the leaderboards" — Are there several leaderboards or only one?
 * ✅ fixed typo, removed plural


 * "This, alongside the enemies' aggressive behaviour encourages" — Put a comma after "behaviour".


 * "The player character can jump and movement speed is high to perform evasive maneouvers" reads like "movement speed" is a verb. Clarify: "The player character can jump with high-speed movement to perform evasive maneouvers".
 * ✅ I've reworded this part. It's not referring to the jump movement speed but simply the player's base movement.


 * "The shogun blast" — Fix grammar and consistency: "The shotgun-like blast".


 * "supplement the jumping mechanism; the player can be propelled further and perform a double jump by firing downwards while jumping" — Minimize use of "while jumping": "supplement the jumping mechanism; the player can be propelled further and perform a double jump by firing downwards while still in the air".

Development and release

 * hellish — Link to Hell


 * "The update also added more statistics such a player's total survival time across all runs" Fix grammar and flow: "The update also added more statistics, such as a player's total survival time across all runs".

Reception

 * "so much of the elements that it borrowed from, that it would be" — Improve prose: "so much of the borrowed elements that it would be".


 * "The game's sound design was lauded critics" — Fix grammar: "The game's sound design was lauded by critics".


 * Are "there was opportunity to incorporate more interesting levels and spaces into the game", "although the retro visual style was fitting, it could also become a hindrance" and "the visuals might not appeal to everyone" really the only criticisms of the game?
 * Pretty much.

Overall

 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall: The problems are easily fixed. Putting it on hold until they are.
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Cognissonance (talk) 16:04, 19 October 2016 (UTC)
 * I think I've addressed everything. Let me know if there are any other issues. --The1337gamer (talk) 18:17, 19 October 2016 (UTC)
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall: The problems are easily fixed. Putting it on hold until they are.
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Cognissonance (talk) 16:04, 19 October 2016 (UTC)
 * I think I've addressed everything. Let me know if there are any other issues. --The1337gamer (talk) 18:17, 19 October 2016 (UTC)
 * I think I've addressed everything. Let me know if there are any other issues. --The1337gamer (talk) 18:17, 19 October 2016 (UTC)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Love it. Cognissonance (talk) 18:36, 19 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Love it. Cognissonance (talk) 18:36, 19 October 2016 (UTC)