Talk:Diadumenian/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 15:40, 17 May 2018 (UTC)

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Discussion
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 * Strictly, a portrait or image on a coin is not a "bust", which applies to sculpture.
 * "Extant artifacts of his coinage as augustus are extremely limited". This sounds contrived, and is arguably ungrammatical. "Extant" is then used a second time in the same sentence. Any chance of rephrasing it?
 * Who is Curtis Clay?
 * Under Numanistics you use "bust" again. See above.
 * Why are Aureus and Half-Aureus capitalised?
 * "Diadumenian was born on 14 September 208, named Marcus Opellius Diadumenianus, to Macrinus, the Praetorian Prefect and future emperor, and his possibly fictitious wife Nonia Celsa. Diadumenian was elevated to caesar in April 217, at Zeugma, while his guard was escorting him from Antioch to Mesopotamia, to join his father." To my mind there is a discontinuity between these two sentences. Consider inserting a sentence stating that Macrinus had become emperor.
 * "He was also given the name Antoninus, in honor of the Antonine dynasty, at this time. Elagabalus revolted at Emesa on 16 May 218, after which Macrinus led his legions to the praetorian fort at Apamea." To my mind there is a discontinuity between these two sentences. Consider inserting a sentence stating who Elagabalus was, and, perhaps, why he revolted.
 * Several links in the lead are repeated in the main text.
 * Per MOS:DL, it is allowed for it to be linked in the lead and then the first usage in the body. Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  00:48, 15 June 2018 (UTC)
 * Who is Artabanus V?
 * "After Macrinus was defeated by Elagabalus on 8 June 218, at the Battle of Antioch, Macrinus fled north to the Bosporus, and entrusted Diadumenian to loyal servants, instructing them to take him into the Parthian Empire, to the court of Artabanus V, to ensure his safety. Diadumenian was captured en route in Zeugma, and executed in late June" An overlong sentence. Gog the Mild (talk) 21:30, 17 May 2018 (UTC)
 * "He was also given the name Antoninus, in honor of the Antonine dynasty, at this time. Elagabalus revolted at Emesa on 16 May 218, after which Macrinus led his legions to the praetorian fort at Apamea." To my mind there is a discontinuity between these two sentences. Consider inserting a sentence stating who Elagabalus was, and, perhaps, why he revolted.
 * Several links in the lead are repeated in the main text.
 * Per MOS:DL, it is allowed for it to be linked in the lead and then the first usage in the body. Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  00:48, 15 June 2018 (UTC)
 * Who is Artabanus V?
 * "After Macrinus was defeated by Elagabalus on 8 June 218, at the Battle of Antioch, Macrinus fled north to the Bosporus, and entrusted Diadumenian to loyal servants, instructing them to take him into the Parthian Empire, to the court of Artabanus V, to ensure his safety. Diadumenian was captured en route in Zeugma, and executed in late June" An overlong sentence. Gog the Mild (talk) 21:30, 17 May 2018 (UTC)
 * "After Macrinus was defeated by Elagabalus on 8 June 218, at the Battle of Antioch, Macrinus fled north to the Bosporus, and entrusted Diadumenian to loyal servants, instructing them to take him into the Parthian Empire, to the court of Artabanus V, to ensure his safety. Diadumenian was captured en route in Zeugma, and executed in late June" An overlong sentence. Gog the Mild (talk) 21:30, 17 May 2018 (UTC)
 * "After Macrinus was defeated by Elagabalus on 8 June 218, at the Battle of Antioch, Macrinus fled north to the Bosporus, and entrusted Diadumenian to loyal servants, instructing them to take him into the Parthian Empire, to the court of Artabanus V, to ensure his safety. Diadumenian was captured en route in Zeugma, and executed in late June" An overlong sentence. Gog the Mild (talk) 21:30, 17 May 2018 (UTC)


 * I believe I have addressed all of your concerns. Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  00:48, 15 June 2018 (UTC)


 * You have indeed. Good work. Gog the Mild (talk) 09:46, 15 June 2018 (UTC)