Talk:Did It On'em/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 20:21, 17 June 2012 (UTC)


 * Thanks Hahc!--(CA)Giacobbe (talk) 20:38, 17 June 2012 (UTC)

First comments
Following, minor edits I made:
 * Lead too long for a single paragraph. Split into three. (done)
 * I uploaded the cover for the single.
 * Fixed that charts section.
 * Italized the album title on 'credits and personnel'
 * Split the paragraph on 'reception', too long.
 * Added quotation marks to "best rapping"

Comments

 * Music video
 * "Director DJ Scoob Doo revealed to MTV News" ... "In an interview with MTV News on May 31, 2011,"
 * The first appearance of MTV News should be wikilinked, not the last. Also, it is mentioned twice too closely, creating a redundant use of the word. Finally, the second says "In an interview with" and the first "revealed to". Better if the order is swapped.

Nothing else to note by now. — Hahc 21  02:16, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
 * "The video..." ... "The video was directed" >> "It was directed" (avoid redundancy)
 * "The video additionally" >> "Additionally, the clip features..." or "Additionally, it features Minaj"
 * "Minaj said that the video was a way of saying thanks to her fans" >> "Minaj stated the video was a gesture of gratitude to her fans" sounds better?
 * All have been completed, anything else?--(CA)Giacobbe (talk) 20:31, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
 * No, nothing else.

Verdict
— Hahc 21  02:25, 19 June 2012 (UTC)