Talk:Didsbury Campus/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Eric Corbett (talk · contribs) 15:55, 31 December 2017 (UTC)

Lead Early history: 1465–1946 Didsbury College of Education: 1946–1977
 * "These are currently being converted into homes ..." "Currently" is definitely a word best avoided. Is it when the article was written? Is it 2018? When is it?
 * Rewritten.
 * "... the rest of the site is undergoing redevelopment as a residential area." This is going to age as the redevelopment is completed. Best rewritten.
 * Rewritten.
 * "The City of Manchester was no exception ...". No exception to what?
 * Removed as redundant.
 * "... the Methodists who still owned the building had moved their business to Bristol." I don't think it's appropriate to think of the Methodists as being in business.
 * Removed.

Polytechnic and university: 1977–2014
 * "... throughout the 1980s and '90s there were ongoing improvements to technology; computers became commonplace, and interactive whiteboards were introduced across all classrooms by 2009." 2009 clearly isn't in the 1980s and '90s. Do you mean something like "interactive whiteboards began to be introduced across all classrooms"?
 * I’ve split it into two sentences, so hopefully it’s clearer. Aiken D 20:44, 4 January 2018 (UTC)


 * I think we're done here now. Congratulations, it's a nice piece of work. Eric   Corbett  01:03, 5 January 2018 (UTC)