Talk:Different Colors/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 09:51, 20 July 2020 (UTC)

For review beginning later today, though may take over a day --Kyle Peake (talk) 09:51, 20 July 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead
✅ ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 06:42, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Do not use hlist; replace with bullet points
 * Target pop to Pop music
 * "song, "Different Colors" is lyrically" → "song, it is lyrically"
 * "released to alternative radio stations" → "released to US alternative radio stations"
 * Move this sentence to being the second of this para instead
 * Target music critics to Music journalism
 * "with many of them commenting on its chorus" → "with many of them praising its chorus" with the appropriate target
 * "top ten hit on the" → "top ten track on the"
 * "for the song, featuring footage of the group touring with colorful visuals, was released on June 11, 2015." → "for the song was released on June 11, 2015, featuring footage of the band touring with colorful visuals."
 * "has been performed live a number of times by the band, including at award shows like the" → "was performed live by Walk the Moon at award shows, including the"
 * "It was included in the setlist of" → "It was included on the setlist for"
 * "was used in campaigns for" → "was used in campaigns of"

Background and composition
✅ ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 06:42, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * "of "Different Colors", which has" → "of "Different Colors", featuring" on the audio sample main text
 * Wikilink pre-chorus to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * The first sentence in prose belongs in the Release and reception section instead and should mentioned that it was released as the opening track; rewrite to something concise on those lines
 * "It was written by all four members of the band and was recorded" → ""Different Colours" was written by all four members of Walk the Moon, while recorded"
 * Target mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music)
 * Target Mastering to Mastering (audio)
 * Wikilink Sterling Sound to itself
 * [3][5][6] should all be solely at the end of the sentence in this order since it is only three refs
 * "It is composed of lots of ebullient synths and consists of" → "The song is composed of numerous ebullient synths, and features" with the target
 * Wikilink pre-chorus to itself
 * "to "create a weird," → "because he wanted to "create a weird," for specifying since this reads confusingly with the explanation sentence next
 * "and are meant to support the" → "and are intended to show support for the"
 * "It was also created to help" → "It was also used to help"
 * "stated that the song is addressed to" → "stated that the song addresses"
 * "by saying "it shows a" → "by saying that "it shows a"
 * "a chance for [the band] to" → "a chance for [Walk the Moon] to"
 * "talking about the inspiration for the track," → "talking about the inspiration for "Different Colors","
 * "how he was frustrated that news segments" → "being frustrated that news segments"
 * "and wanted "to write" → "and that the band "to write"

Release and reception

 * "pre-orders of Talking Is Hard on" → "pre-orders of Talking Is Hard via"
 * "The song was also made available for steaming" → "Simultaneously, the song was made available for streaming"
 * "It impacted alternative radio stations" → "It impacted US alternative radio stations"
 * Remove wikilink on extended play
 * "on December 4, 2015,[16] which" → "on December 4 of that year, which" moving [16] to the end of the sentence
 * "of "Different Colors" done by Lost Kings and The Griswolds," → "of "Different Colors", done by Lost Kings and the Griswolds, respectively." per MOS:THEMUSIC
 * "a cover of" → "The EP also features a cover of" as this should now be a new sentence
 * "by The Isley Brothers, and" → "by the Isley Brothers, and"
 * "were donated to the" → "were set to be donated to the"
 * "received mostly positive reviews from music critics." → "was met with mostly positive reviews from music critics." with the target
 * "indie rock" in his review of Talking Is Hard." → "indie rock"." since that is off topic
 * "and that it "is bound to" → "and it "is bound to"
 * Target Vulture to Vulture.com
 * "about the song, writing that the track" → "towards the song, writing that it"
 * "but mentioned that its chorus "is probably" → "but called the chorus "probably"
 * "The reviewer noted that the" → "The staff of the publication noted that the"
 * Should the list be in speech marks?
 * I see music lists being in speech marks like ones on this article.

✅ all other fixes. ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 06:42, 22 July 2020 (UTC)

Commercial performance
✅ ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 06:49, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * "In the United States, "Different Colors" debuted at number 36 on Billboard" → ""Different Colors" debuted at number 36 on the US Billboard"
 * Target Alternative Songs to Alternative Airplay
 * "third top ten hit on the chart." → "third top ten hit on the Alternative Songs chart."
 * "It spent a total of 20 weeks" → "The song spent a total of 20 weeks"
 * "on the Alternative Songs 2015 year-end chart." → "on the US Alternative Songs year-end chart for 2015."
 * Wikilink Rock Airplay to itself
 * "on the week ending October 30, 2015," → "for the issue date of October 30, 2015,"
 * "On the Hot Rock Songs chart," → "On the US Hot Rock Songs chart,"
 * "and also logged 20 weeks there." → "and also logged 20 weeks on the chart."
 * "On the week ending December 25, 2015," → "For the issue dated December 25, 2015,"
 * Wikilink Hot Singles Sales to itself
 * "at number three following the release" → "at number three, following the release"
 * Wikilink Canada Rock to itself

Music video
✅ ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 06:56, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Retitle to Promotional videos, since not only is there more than one but a lyric video is not the same as a music video
 * "one of the landmarks in Cincinnati featured" → "one of Cincinnati's landmarks featured" on the img main text
 * Wikilink lyric video to itself; do this in prose too
 * "was filmed in the band's" → "was filmed in Walk the Moon's"
 * "This is Walk the Moon's" → "The visual stood as the band's"
 * "The official music video, featuring" → "An accompanying music video, featuring"
 * "Directed by Nathan Crooker and Patrick Nichols," → "It was directed by Nathan Crooker and Patrick Nichols."
 * "the video visually features many bright colors with" → "The video visually includes the bright colors of"
 * "which had been a thing picked up" → "which was picked up"
 * "by saying: "We've heard" → "saying: "We've heard"
 * "Speaking about the creation of the video," → "Referencing the creation of the music video,"
 * "the band tweeted that they" → "Walk the Moon tweeted that they" with the wikilink
 * "of [the group's] favorite" → "of [the band's] favorite"

Live performances
✅ ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 07:12, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Merge this with the next section since each is only one para and retitle to Live performances and use in other media
 * "on October 16, 2013." → "on October 16, 2013 by Walk the Moon."
 * "in the setlist of Walk the Moon's" → "on the setlist of their"
 * "The band played" → "That same year, the band played"
 * "It was performed live" → "It was performed live by them"
 * "The band performed" → "Walk the Moon performed"
 * "by the group on" → "by the band for"
 * "on September 25, 2015." → "on September 25 of that year."
 * "It was also performed at the" → "They also performed it at the"
 * "on November 7, 2015." → "on November 7 of that year."
 * "It was performed at" → "It was performed by them at"

Use in other media

 * I did suggest merging, but this should be a separate para once you have merged the sections
 * Add release year of the film in (brackets)
 * Target to Paper Towns should be on "of the same name"
 * "titled "Subway Serenade" for" are you sure it shouldn't be "entitled Subway Serenade for"
 * The CNET article had the title of the video in quotes, which is why I used them.

✅ all other fixes. ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 07:12, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * "dancing and rhythmically" → "dancing, while rhythmically"
 * "While AT&T initially wanted" → "Though AT&T initially wanted"

Track listing
✅ ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 07:23, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Retitle to Track listings since there is more than one

Credits and personnel
✅ ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 07:23, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Remove wikilink on California
 * Use so there is the right space between credits and personnel
 * Target recording to Audio engineer
 * Target mixing to Audio mixing (recorded music)
 * Target mastering to Mastering (audio)

Weekly charts
✅ ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 07:23, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Wikilink Hot Singles Sales to itself

Year-end charts
✅ ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 07:23, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Annual chart performance for "Different Colors" → 2015 year-end chart performance for "Different Colors"

Release history
✅ ThedancingMOONpolice (talk) 07:23, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Label → Label(s)
 * Wasn't the initial release also streaming?
 * Remove target on EP

Final comments and verdict

 * Changed some of my comments about the lead, but I am now ready to put this article until the issues are fixed. --Kyle Peake (talk) 09:59, 21 July 2020 (UTC)
 * I was unaware you had completed the fixes since you did not mark the section as done initially, sorry, I will now ✅ the article after using the Fix dead links tool for you. --K. Peake 08:14, 27 July 2020 (UTC)