Talk:Digital divide in Bangladesh

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Group Comments While I have noticed that you have posted some sources into your group discussion board, you really need to be posting these and working in your group sandbox. By this point in the class you should have a basic outline of your page. I would suggest as you work on that and your upcoming draft, that each member puts their name by the section on which they are working. This should help you keep track of who is doing what. I am also including a link to the Digital Divide in South Africa. This is a good example of about how much you should be writing for each section, though obviously your sections will likely not be identical to those in this article. Please be sure to come by mine or Dr. Benoit's office hours should you need any help. Again, while it is good that you have been looking up sources, make sure this is being put in your outline in the group sandbox space. Mmaggi9 (talk) 16:50, 11 October 2017 (UTC)Melanie Maggio: TA for LIS 2000

Link to Digital Divide in South Africa
I apologize, here is the link for the example page. [|Digital Divide in South Africa] Mmaggi9 (talk) 16:52, 11 October 2017 (UTC)Melanie Maggio: TA for LIS 2000

Group Comments for the Draft
While your lead is a good starting point, you should have finished your outline and already begun more of your drafting process by now. Make sure that your section titles are relevant to what you are discussing in your lead, and make sure that your citations are all together. Please complete this this week so that we can give you feedback as you move forward. Please let Dr. Benoit and I know if you have any further questions.

Mmaggi9 (talk) 01:38, 17 October 2017 (UTC) Melanie Maggio: TA for LIS 2000

Group Comments for the Draft
Looks like you are making some great progress on your draft. Judging on the sandbox and the history page, it looks like there are only two of you actively working on your project. Is this correct? Eabenoit (talk) 14:43, 23 October 2017 (UTC)eabenoit

Yes, that is correct Jlee214 (talk) 23:07, 23 October 2017 (UTC)

Ashlyn's Peer Review
First, I want to say that your article is off to a great start. You have a strong lead, and each of you contributed useful information that was also on topic for the country in your digital divide. In addition, your article is well labeled and easy to follow. However, there are a few suggestions I have.

I think you should take the last sentence that details solutions out of your lead, and instead create separate paragraphs discussing these solutions individually. The lead is strong, but it doesn't need to reveal all of your information at once.

In the "Government and Community" section, I think it would be beneficial to elaborate a little more on what information and communication technologies are, or at least what that means in terms of devices in Bangladesh. I also think this sentence contains a typo: "The government of Bangladesh also withdrew "the financial import duties associated with computers and peripheral equipment" in 200 to make ICTs more affordable to the public." I understood it as the year being 2000.

In the "Education" section, I was confused by the last sentence, "Satisfaction and gratification from using the technology are key points in bridging the gap." How do satisfaction and gratification play a role? Are you referring to personal success encouraging more people to become further educated on these technologies?

Lastly, your third cited link for the article, "Paving the pathway for women’s empowerment? A review of information and communication technology development in Bangladesh," does not work.

Other than these minor adjustments, I think the article is well organized and informative. Great job!

Abrielle's Peer Review
Lead: This lead looks very promising, very well put together. Although it is well written, it may be a little too detailed

Government and Community: Overall, good use of multiple sources spread throughout the section, but maybe try to transition between topics more. A lot of information is covered in little space. It may be beneficial to break the first sentence into two sentences, it seems a little chunky. Sentence 4- Explain what VSAT is, it's a little vague. Sentence 5- 200 should be 2000 I'm guessing? Sentences 6 and 7 repeat each other.

Education: Good explanation on the breakdown of the schooling system, it's brief and easy to understand. Sentence 3 should be revised. Overall, great section.

Maddie's Revisions
In my section I rearranged some sentences and fixed some that didn't make sense according to our peer reviews. I also added a few more sentences in the hope to elaborate a bit more. MadelineDeLeo (talk) 00:08, 6 November 2017 (UTC)

Jana's Revisions
In my section, I fixed the error both reviewers pointed out, which was the 200 typo. I also deleted the last sentence of the lead, which talked about digital divide solutions. I divided the first sentence in Government and Community into two sentences and deleted a repeating sentence someone pointed out. Instead of explaining what a VSAT and ICTs are I linked them to their Wikipedia pages. I don't know how to fix the link in the sources list that doesn't work. Jlee214 (talk) 00:39, 6 November 2017 (UTC)