Talk:Disappearance of Tiffany Whitton

RSN noticeboard
I've raised a question about the use of the main source in this article at Reliable sources/Noticeboard. MPS1992 (talk) 19:13, 8 September 2018 (UTC)

Fragment
The sentence fragment in question seems to have been reintroduced by this revert. 2600:8800:1880:1084:5604:A6FF:FE38:4B26 (talk) 06:12, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
 * I don't know why you removed it. Without those five words at the end, "without" leaves the reader hanging. The point was that, as the cited source says, he didn't realize she was using heroin until she went through withdrawal one morning, because even though he's an admitted methhead he avoids heroin so he wouldn't have recognized the signs of her addiction. Daniel Case (talk) 06:37, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
 * I parsed it as "Whitton, however, also became addicted to heroin without Caudle[.]" which seemed to be a complete statement. The phrasing, as you have restored it, is stilted and awkward to understand. How about 2600:8800:1880:1084:5604:A6FF:FE38:4B26 (talk) 06:49, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
 * OK, fine. Daniel Case (talk) 16:12, 13 September 2018 (UTC)

Adoption
The main reason I cleared up the language about her adoption is because the original wording linked her comment only to her pregnancy, when the article indicates it was also about placing the baby for adoption. 2600:8800:1880:1084:5604:A6FF:FE38:4B26 (talk) 18:38, 15 September 2018 (UTC)
 * OK, I see your point. We'll work with this. Daniel Case (talk) 22:12, 15 September 2018 (UTC)

excessive comma use
With regard to this edit, it's ugly. It breaks the flow of the sentence and makes for harder reading. The lack of the second comma in the sentence is not grammatically incorrect, so why have it? Chaheel Riens (talk) 08:59, 30 November 2019 (UTC)
 * On further reflection I suppose we could recast the sentence to avoid the issue. I felt the second comma was necessary because without it, "he noted" points to the phrase after it; I put it in that way because a) without it the statement looks like the article itself is taking a point of view and b) I meant for "he noted" to emphasize what came before it. Daniel Case (talk) 23:53, 30 November 2019 (UTC)