Talk:Don't Cry for Me Argentina/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 17:04, 15 September 2015 (UTC)

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 * , by checking out → Too informal
 * however intensity which Rice looked for in the track was not immediately achieved during recording, because of the lyrical content and the song being a sentimental ballad composition. → So intensity wasn't achieve through being a sentimental ballad? Isn't it easier to achieve that in a ballad than an uptempo song?
 * on 12 November 1976, in the United Kingdom, accompanied by national and trade advertising, full-color → You've used British date formatting but American English for color (colour)
 * on US dance charts. → Specify which
 * number of nations, including the Billboard Hot 100, → Hot 100 isn't a nation
 * developing the Evita → Remove 'the'
 * Link broadway
 * It's tune is → Melody? Composition?
 * Comment from Richard3120: Melody would be my choice of word here. Richard3120 (talk) 15:44, 19 September 2015 (UTC)
 * musical, "Oh What a Circus" and → Don't you need a comma before 'and' too?
 * full-color posters, → Same for colour here
 * Finally on the wee → Reads bias
 * It was officially released as the soundtrack's second single → You've just spoken about the remix, but I take it that the remix wasn't the single?
 * I think to switch to American date formatting is confusing. As such, this is a British article, so the dates should remain as British format throughout, and not be changed to American because Madonna is.
 * and that "'Don't Cry For Me Argentina' stank then, stinks now". → The " and ' before Don't needs the template to separate them
 * Hot Dance Club Songs → Dance Club Songs (for prose, table and refs)
 * Ref 63 has a double "" in the title

On hold. — Calvin999 11:30, 19 September 2015 (UTC)


 * Additional comments from Richard3120:
 * I'm British, and when referring to Andrew Lloyd Webber just by his surname we nearly always say "Lloyd Webber" rather than just "Webber". Lloyd Webber's Wikipedia article uses this convention, so I wonder what name is used in most of the sources, like Tim Rice's book, for example – does he call his writing partner "Webber", "Lloyd Webber" or "Andrew"?
 * "Webber and Rice were at a dearth of finding a suitable musical actress..." – normally you face a dearth, but I think here it would be simpler just to say "Webber and Rice were struggling to find a suitable musical actress..."
 * I don't like the line "Covington was extremely intrigued behind the idea of the musical, thinking Eva Perón as a noncommercial idea for a musical" – you can't be "intrigued behind". I think this would read better as "Covington was extremely intrigued by the idea, considering Eva Perón to be a noncommercial idea for a musical" – you don't really want to repeat the phrase "idea for a musical" twice in the same sentence. Richard3120 (talk) 15:44, 19 September 2015 (UTC)
 * all done. And thanks for the wonderful pointers Richard. — Indian: BIO  [ ChitChat  ] 09:37, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
 * No problem – I was a bit worried about butting in because I know the GA review is supposed to be between the proposer and the reviewer, but those two sentences really didn't scan well to me and I thought I should mention them. If I find something confirming the release date and the radio play, as we talked about before, I'll add it in. Richard3120 (talk) 15:14, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

Thanks. Well done. Passing. — Calvin999 16:31, 24 September 2015 (UTC)