Talk:Don Revie/GA1

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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 10:08, 24 May 2015 (UTC)

Right, will copyedit as I go and post queries below....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 10:08, 24 May 2015 (UTC)


 * His mother died when he was 12 - very short sentence - do we have a cause or something to add to it to make it a bit longer?


 * .. the "Foxes" fared poorly... - why quotes?


 * ... He chose to join the "Tigers" ahead of bigger clubs..ditto


 *  The "Citizens" struggled - ditto


 *  Similarly to the end of his time at Leicester, - ungainly, why not just, "As at Leicester,.."?


 *  did not appreciate talented players like Revie and preferred to play a physical style of play - hmm, comes over as a bit POVish....can it be worded more neutrally?


 *  no big egos at the club - now that's something I would put in quotes (the words "big egos", if they were his exact words)


 *  In one of Jones's first appearances at Leeds they recorded a 7–0 victory over Chelsea, though ironically Jones was not on the score-sheet. - try to remove one "Jones"


 *  Colin Todd stated that Revie was ill-suited to international managements, with his strengths lying in the day-to-day contact found only in club management rather than the politics and committee meetings of international management - try to remove on "international management"

Ok - - all done reading now. A nice read overall and not too much to fix. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 20:47, 24 May 2015 (UTC)
 * OK, dealt with all that. Thanks!--EchetusXe 10:18, 25 May 2015 (UTC)

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 * Pass or Fail: - good work Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 10:59, 25 May 2015 (UTC)