Talk:Donna Freedman/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer:  Bramble  claw  x   21:32, 27 January 2011 (UTC)

After looking over the article, I can say that the article does not meet quick fail criteria. Therefore I will look over the article, and continue to review tomorrow. 21:38, 27 January 2011 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Both seem fine to me.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * I'm going to pass the references. I have a slight, nagging concern about the character event description (section "2008-2011") being original research. However, I suppose that's largely unavoidable for works such as this (TV shows, books, etc.) If you could find sources for the plot summary that are not the show itself, that would be amazing though.
 * WP:TVPLOT does say that plot summaries don't normally require sourcing as the show itself is the source, but I'll do what I did on Chris Pappas and source a few storylines. - JuneGloom    Talk  20:37, 9 February 2011 (UTC)


 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * Very, very detailed, but covers has a wide range of topics within its sections. Very good.
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * Yes it's neutral.
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * Yes it's stable.
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * It's not really feasible to include any more images, since they'd all have to be fair use, and wouldn't serve much of a purpose so I'll pass this as well.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

After weeks of grumbling to myself that no one was going to review this article, you had to pick it up right when I decide to give the storylines another trim. I really hope you don't mind that I trimmed them while you were reviewing and thanks for taking this article on. :) - JuneGloom    Talk  01:26, 28 January 2011 (UTC)
 * That's fine. There's no rule about editing the article while the review is happening (as long as it's not edit warring). It is quite a long article, so it may take me a bit longer than usual to read the whole thing. Hope you don't mind...  Bramble  claw  x   02:32, 29 January 2011 (UTC)
 * I don't mind at all, please take your time. :) - JuneGloom    Talk  22:01, 29 January 2011 (UTC)

Prose
In the lead, it says "steals Sunny Lee's first kiss". This sounds like a colloquial expression to me (I'm not familiar with this expression), but taken literally, it seems to imply that she robbed someone of a kiss (which of course, sounds rather weird). Therefore, I think it would be better to make that more clear to the lay-reader by changing the phrase.  Bramble  claw  x  
 * ✅ - JuneGloom    Talk  22:01, 29 January 2011 (UTC)

Same phrase about stealing a first kiss, this time in the section called Bisexuality.  Bramble  claw  x   02:11, 2 February 2011 (UTC)
 * ✅ - JuneGloom    Talk  17:55, 3 February 2011 (UTC)

Any further issues for the writer to fix or can it be passed? Wizardman Operation Big Bear 16:30, 12 February 2011 (UTC)
 * No more issues. I was just spending a bit of time looking over the final stuff. The article is very well written, and is well-referenced. It presents lots of information, and is of excellent quality. Therefore, I am passing this GA review. Congratulations, and keep up the great work!  Bramble  claw  x   22:12, 12 February 2011 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much for the review and for passing the article! :) - JuneGloom    Talk  22:21, 12 February 2011 (UTC)
 * No problem.  Bramble  claw  x   22:24, 12 February 2011 (UTC)