Talk:Doug Mountjoy/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 23:09, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

Hi, I'll take this one. Feel free to argue or correct any of my points!

Prelim

 * No dup links
 * No images to check - is anything, even a vaguer non-Doug Mountjoy specific, image possible?
 * No edit war
 * Earwig reports copyvio issue with reference #3, needs wording changed more in early life section

Lede and infobox

 * "Mountjoy qualified for the World Championship" - link which World Championship
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 23:26, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
 * The 49 century breaks aren't mentioned or cited in text, similarly career winnings
 * Removed Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 23:26, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

Career

 * "he had an attack of Bell's palsy which partially paralysed his face." - clarify when this happened exactly?
 * I don't have a date, just that it happened between 80 and 81. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 23:33, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "With the problem cleared" - what does this mean?
 * Reworded. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 23:33, 31 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "fluking" needs a link
 * Added a link. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 23:33, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "Mountjoy won only one more frame as Davis eased to an 18–12 victory." - I was a little uncertain about some of the wording up to this point, but this especially seems a little much - the article referencing this in fact describes him "clinch"ing the victory
 * I have reworked, hopefully is better. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 23:33, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "to go with his 1980 title." - why is this mentioned here and not chronologically earlier on?
 * Moved Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 23:33, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "losing to Cliff Thorburn." - the final of the Masters seems notable enough to deserve the score?
 * Added score and ref. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 23:33, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "having previously won it in 1978." - again with the chronology?
 * Moved up Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 23:37, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "He won another Welsh title in 1987" - link available?
 * Added Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 23:37, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "but otherwise he struggled" > "but otherwise struggled"
 * Done Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 23:37, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "1–9 defeat to Steve Longworth in the 1986 UK Championship." - which round?
 * Added Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 23:37, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "By 1988 he was out of the top 16 in the world rankings." - this is the first time his world ranking is even mentioned. Would expect it to have at least been mentioned earlier on when he did breach the top 16
 * So, the rankings never used to be that big a deal, as there was only a handful of players in the 1970s. It wasn't until the late 80s, where you would need a high ranking to not have to qualify where it became a big deal. He was ranked world number 14 after his first pro season for instance. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 23:43, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "but did appear in the 2002 World Snooker Championship." - to what result?
 * Clarified he lost in qualifying. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 23:37, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
 * The lede mentions him coaching the UAE team but this isn't mentioned anywhere else
 * Now added to body. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 23:41, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

Death

 * Should probably link stroke
 * Link World Snooker and WPBSA?
 * Doesn't seem like the more enthusiastic epitaph in that quote, but if that's what they said...!
 * Linked all. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 23:39, 31 October 2021 (UTC)

That's all I have for now. Thanks, Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 23:09, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
 * I think I have everything Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski  (talk • contribs) 23:43, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
 * With one minor correction I've made, I'm happy to pass this as satisfying the GA criteria. Thanks, Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 23:54, 31 October 2021 (UTC)