Talk:Down Will Come Baby/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Nineteen Ninety-Four guy (talk · contribs) 17:53, 24 November 2022 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

✅ Sorry it has taken you awhile for a reviewer.
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Infobox
 * Use Template:Based on in relevant infobox parameter
 * I saw the opening credit sequence on YouTube and found that the writer is given a "Teleplay by" credit. Just move the entry to "screenplay" parameter and change it to "teleplay"
 * Lede
 * The film stars Meredith Baxter as Leah, While this is not ungrammatical per se, this could be restructured to The film tells the story of Leah (played by Meredith Baxter) for consistency with the other parentheticals used.
 * "who prioritizes her work" -> drop "her"
 * Plot
 * causing tension with her husband Marcus who wants her to spend more time with her family follow "Marcus" with a comma
 * Meanwhile, Leah accepts a big promotion that requires her to move to Denver such that she only gets to see her family on the weekends. comma after "Denver"
 * While hanging out at the park, Robin is approached by a friendly stranger named Dorothy Cotton who later turns out to be Robin's new neighbour. comma after "Dorothy Cotton"; change "neighbour" to U.S. spelling (MOS:TIES)
 * "and dismisses his wife's concerns" seems tautological. How about "but Marcus reassures her that Dorothy is just trying to be a good friend"?
 * Dorothy encourages Robin to confide in her and Robin admits that she blames herself for her friend Amelia's death. precede and with a comma
 * -> Dorothy shares that her younger sister was also named Amelia, who she claims accidentally fell to her death when they were playing in their attic as children.
 * -> Robin becomes creeped out by Dorothy's increasingly obsessive behavior, which includes stalking her, rearranging her bedroom, and yelling at the girl when she does not follow her instructions to the letter.
 * Robin shares her fears with Marcus who thinks she is overreacting. comma after "Marcus"
 * Marcus is grateful when Dorothy agrees to stay over with Robin while both he and Leah are out of town. drop "both"
 * The worried couple convince their landlord to unlock Dorothy's barely lived-in apartment where they find photographs of Robin's friend Amelia. comma after "apartment"
 * Leah and Marcus break into the summer camp's office where they find out that Dorothy's real name is Gretchen McIntyre. comma after "office"
 * link "guilt" to Survivor guilt
 * Cast
 * Use Template:Cast listing. Since WP:FILMCAST requires each item be explicitly sourced, you can use the Variety review, which, btw, lists last two additional cast members not in the article: Rahla Kahn as Sophie & Summer Patterson as Brina
 * -> Dorothy shares that her younger sister was also named Amelia, who she claims accidentally fell to her death when they were playing in their attic as children.
 * -> Robin becomes creeped out by Dorothy's increasingly obsessive behavior, which includes stalking her, rearranging her bedroom, and yelling at the girl when she does not follow her instructions to the letter.
 * Robin shares her fears with Marcus who thinks she is overreacting. comma after "Marcus"
 * Marcus is grateful when Dorothy agrees to stay over with Robin while both he and Leah are out of town. drop "both"
 * The worried couple convince their landlord to unlock Dorothy's barely lived-in apartment where they find photographs of Robin's friend Amelia. comma after "apartment"
 * Leah and Marcus break into the summer camp's office where they find out that Dorothy's real name is Gretchen McIntyre. comma after "office"
 * link "guilt" to Survivor guilt
 * Cast
 * Use Template:Cast listing. Since WP:FILMCAST requires each item be explicitly sourced, you can use the Variety review, which, btw, lists last two additional cast members not in the article: Rahla Kahn as Sophie & Summer Patterson as Brina
 * The worried couple convince their landlord to unlock Dorothy's barely lived-in apartment where they find photographs of Robin's friend Amelia. comma after "apartment"
 * Leah and Marcus break into the summer camp's office where they find out that Dorothy's real name is Gretchen McIntyre. comma after "office"
 * link "guilt" to Survivor guilt
 * Cast
 * Use Template:Cast listing. Since WP:FILMCAST requires each item be explicitly sourced, you can use the Variety review, which, btw, lists last two additional cast members not in the article: Rahla Kahn as Sophie & Summer Patterson as Brina
 * Cast
 * Use Template:Cast listing. Since WP:FILMCAST requires each item be explicitly sourced, you can use the Variety review, which, btw, lists last two additional cast members not in the article: Rahla Kahn as Sophie & Summer Patterson as Brina
 * Use Template:Cast listing. Since WP:FILMCAST requires each item be explicitly sourced, you can use the Variety review, which, btw, lists last two additional cast members not in the article: Rahla Kahn as Sophie & Summer Patterson as Brina

Will continue later. Nineteen Ninety-Four guy (talk) 17:53, 24 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Production
 * "serving as the executive producers" - drop "the"
 * Release and reception
 * - "with a total of 11.4 million viewers"; remove comma following "overall" and add comma following "season" as well
 * Despite his criticisms, Morrison acknowledged that the film was "effective and occasionally well-handled," with an engaging plot and cast. Nonetheless, he felt that its constant gloom ultimately made for an unpleasant viewing experience. - These could be merged into one sentence with a conjunction, like Despite his criticisms, Morrison acknowledged that the film was "effective and occasionally well-handled", with an engaging plot and cast; although he felt that its constant gloom ultimately made for an unpleasant viewing experience. Comma is placed outside the quote for proper logical quotation
 * "a hodgepodge script and so many plot holes." - place period outside the quote, and give link to plot holes
 * "the real horror is that movies like this are still made in the era of two-income families." ditto
 * "a hodgepodge script and so many plot holes." - place period outside the quote, and give link to plot holes
 * "the real horror is that movies like this are still made in the era of two-income families." ditto
 * "the real horror is that movies like this are still made in the era of two-income families." ditto
 * "the real horror is that movies like this are still made in the era of two-income families." ditto

Thanks for taking on this review. I'll mark every issue I think I've addressed with the done template. Bennv123 (talk) 20:10, 24 November 2022 (UTC)
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * Everything is reliably sourced and verifiable, at least those supported with web-based sources; I'm assuming good faith on sources I don't have access to. No copyvio detected upon close inspection as well.
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * Nothing strays off topic, and nominator has reasonably covered everything they could about the article
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * It's as neutral as it gets.
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * All good, although affirm poster's fair-use rationale image has rationale=yes
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * I think I've addressed all the issues you've brought up. Let me know if I missed anything or if there are additional issues to address. Regards. Bennv123 (talk) 08:39, 25 November 2022 (UTC)
 * All good. It's a pass. Bravo! I'd like to wrap up this review by saying that there are some interesting facts in the article that merit a nomination to be featured in the main page via Did you know. Nineteen Ninety-Four guy (talk) 09:28, 25 November 2022 (UTC)