Talk:Downtown Triangle (Jerusalem)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 14:38, 28 July 2014 (UTC)

Right, I will take a look and jot queries below....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 14:38, 28 July 2014 (UTC)


 * Lead


 *  From the mid-1940s through the 1960s, the Triangle was "the commercial, cultural and economic center of...Jerusalem" - surely we can write this without quotes and paraphrase differently?
 * ✅ Yoninah (talk) 01:02, 29 July 2014 (UTC)
 *  the commercial viability of the Triangle deteriorated - erg, if it did decline, just say so, no need to go on about viability if it was an actuality I think......
 * I changed "deteriorated" to "declined" - is that what you wanted? Yoninah (talk) 01:02, 29 July 2014 (UTC)
 * Sort of...when I wrote it I was more concerned about the term "viability" but on thinking about it again am ok with it. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 01:56, 29 July 2014 (UTC)


 * History


 * Did the old commercial segment(s) of Jaffa Road overlap with what is now the Triangle, or was it in a different bit?
 * The commercial strip called Jaffa Road extended from the Old City Walls westward, passing the triangle. I made a small change in the article, and will try to see if I can find a source. Yoninah (talk) 01:02, 29 July 2014 (UTC)
 * ✅ Good thing I looked at the source again. I edited this section accordingly. Yoninah (talk) 21:18, 2 August 2014 (UTC)
 * How did the name arise? was it officially designated or did it come about as an informal name?
 * Since the British developed a triangular district, it was popularly called "the Triangle". I'll try to find a source. Yoninah (talk) 01:02, 29 July 2014 (UTC)
 * ✅ Source added in parentheses. Yoninah (talk) 21:18, 2 August 2014 (UTC)
 *  demand for "detective stories, histories, and newspapers from Germany and England". - I think we can rewrite this without quotes too..
 * ✅ Yoninah (talk) 01:02, 29 July 2014 (UTC)
 *  A standout example is the Sansur building - don't need to mention it is a "standout example" as merely mentioning the building here notes this...let the facts speak for themselves.
 * ✅ Yoninah (talk)
 * I'd link cold cuts, neo-Renaissance, classicist
 * ✅ Yoninah (talk)


 * Decline and rebirth


 *  weaning customers away from the city center. - I'd say "weaning off" or "drawing away" but not "weaning away"....
 * ✅ Yoninah (talk)


 * Bombing attacks

I'd not have "(see Ben Yehuda Street bombings)" in body of text but make a seealso note under the header and maybe note how many there'd been or discuss a tiny bit more.
 * OK, will expand. Yoninah (talk) 01:02, 29 July 2014 (UTC)
 * I think I'd have Zion Square refrigerator bombing as a single sentence rather than a seealso. Also does the area have any obvious increased security or memorials from these? Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 00:40, 3 August 2014 (UTC)
 * ✅ I expanded the section and moved the Zion Square refrigerator bombing into a sentence. I found only one mention of a memorial, though the next time I go downtown I could look around for other, smaller memorial plaques. There is no increased security presence to my knowledge. Yoninah (talk) 21:53, 11 August 2014 (UTC)


 * Landmarks


 * If many of these won't have independent daughter articles, I'd add a sentence or two to give them some colour and make the section less listy.
 * OK, will expand. Yoninah (talk) 01:02, 29 July 2014 (UTC)
 * ✅ Yoninah (talk) 22:01, 19 August 2014 (UTC)

Otherwise a nice read and (I think) within striking distance of GA status...cheers, Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 15:03, 28 July 2014 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the speedy review! I'll start addressing your concerns. Yoninah (talk) 17:31, 28 July 2014 (UTC)


 * I apologize, I've been unable to work on this due to work and family concerns. Expanding the bombing attacks section is going to take some time; I was planning to research that when I expand Ben Yehuda Street. The expansion of Landmarks is more minor, but I'm not finding time to do it. Could this be put on hold? Yoninah (talk) 15:04, 8 August 2014 (UTC)
 * Yeah, happy to leave this open until you get to it - prefer that it gets done right once rather than yo-yoing, so take your time and I will leave this open. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:39, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
 * Thanks. I think I covered everything now. Yoninah (talk) 22:01, 19 August 2014 (UTC)

1. Well written?:
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2. Factually accurate and verifiable?:
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3. Broad in coverage?:
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4. Reflects a neutral point of view?:
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5. Reasonably stable?
 * No edit wars, etc. (Vandalism does not count against GA):

6. Illustrated by images, when possible and appropriate?:
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Overall:
 * Pass or Fail: a nice read. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 03:14, 20 August 2014 (UTC)


 * Thanks! Yoninah (talk) 11:21, 20 August 2014 (UTC)